Andrew McLaurin

@ellette-giselle

My brother “I find so much satisfaction in forceful hand clapping. It satisfies my satisfactions needs”

Lol, sounds like one of my sisters.

@whalekeeper @loopylin @hybridlore @rae @raxforge @grcr @ellette-giselle

Ellis — Elderstrand (Group 1)

Ellis slashed at one of the armored warriors, scoring the armor with a dark scorch mark, resisting more than it should have. His enemy swung a heavy fist at his head, and he ducked past it. A second opponent’s fist came out of nowhere,…[Read more]

@loopylin

Well, I think the only one that’s dead is the one Flare crushed. Unless what Marcel did was supposed to have killed it in the process of de-armoring it (either way, without armor, it won’t last long.) The third one, if I’m understanding what happened, should still be alive, unless the staff actually pierced into its body. Based on h…[Read more]

@loopylin

I think I’ll add another character after the fight is over, if that’s alright. Or guess technically two characters. One and a half? I should go back and check how many character slots we’re allowed.

There are currently 16 characters total, which means that the limit per person is currently 4.

@raxforge

There are actually biological creatures inside the armor. Marcel’s exclamation that they are made of iron was in erroneous as he later discovered, though I see how when he later said that they “aren’t solid” it could have been misinterpreted as saying they are hollow. What he really meant (I assume) is that they aren’t solid metal (i.e.…[Read more]

@raxforge

Suddenly, one of the knights (am I getting this right?)

Basically. If you missed it when I introduced them earlier, these are called Ironwalkers. They are humanoid creatures clad entirely in armor. Their helmets have a completely smooth front with no eye holes or any other facial features. (Because they don’t have eyes.) They also don’t…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

So, even though this doesn’t sound pleasant, what I ended up doing was reading the chapter through and then rewriting it completely, using the old chapter as a reference point for events that needed to happen and dialogue I wanted to keep.

That is what I’m doing as well, but either my new ideas are much better than my old or my q…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I would be interested in your reasons behind why you don’t agree with her/my reasoning. Though keep in mind I won’t be changing this scene, so if you find it a waste of time then don’t bother explaining.

To put it simply, it is impossible for God to lie (Hebrews 6:18). Now of course, things are different for God, but Jesus, in Hi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

 This is one of the best ones yet!!

Huh. You often supprise me with the scenes that you think are the best.

I’m curious, did you write this from scratch, or was it in the draft?

In my first draft, I was unsure if I wanted to send Alan to save The Faithful after he joined them. Event happened differently there. Alan found out ab…[Read more]

@keilah-h

 It does seem a tiny bit sudden, but I don’t know cause I’ve never actually seen a person get saved and them follow their life immediately afterward. 

Alan does feel a little bit rushed to get back to planning since other people are in danger. He also felt the need to apologize to Rour, and had to go through Stripe to get to him.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I was a little distratded during this chapter because I do disagree with you on weather or not it is okay for Christians to lie to protect others. However, I don’t really have a response to the arguments that Sabina gives and I belive this to be a tercarary issue, so unless you want to discus this, I’m willing to leave it…[Read more]

@jonas YES!

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @grcr @raxforge @loopylin

Baron (Brutus)—Group 1, Elderstrand edge

Brutus sighed, before coughing once more. After which, he harnessed the wind once again, throwing the strong wind at the foremost figure, trying to knock it over. But nothing appeared to happen to the things. Brutus gave a cry,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Troy was a big hint. I also some some other things from it that poped up in my feed that contained some greek mythology gods/creatures, so I thought that might be the case

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow

Next chapter! This scene was a little fun to write as it uses a new location that did not exist within my first draft.

The last bit of character I want Alan to develop may now be more apparent, Keliah.

Chapter the 24th – The Plan

@the_lost-journal

So thats a semi yes!? Yay! Ok I have a creature idea for the Deewater! It is a serpent like creature, it stalks under boats and attacks when least expected. since I imagine the waters are “deep” (crazy right!) I imagine it lives deep in the waters, so little is known about it. And it rarely comes up. But when it does it att…

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@ellette-giselle

Is the musical based off of the Iliad or Odessy?

@whalekeeper

I mean, they’re technically just NPCs, so yes, (though I would recommend using them sparingly.) In this case, I happen to agree with @rae‘s assessment and will be deploying them anyway, lol.

@whalekeeper @rae @raxforge @loopylin @hybridlore @grcr @ellette-giselle

Ellis — Elderstrand (Group 1)

Within a few seconds, the fight was…[Read more]

@jonas

Yeah, that does a perfect job!

I might want to “approve”

So thats a semi yes!? Yay! Ok I have a creature idea for the Deewater! It is a serpent like creature, it stalks under boats and attacks when least expected. since I imagine the waters are “deep” (crazy right!) I imagine it lives deep in the waters, so little is known about it. And…[Read more]

@anyone

So, I just read Pride and Prejudice for co-op, and now I want to watch one of the movies. Which one is the best one?