Kingdom Pen | raevynstar | Mentions https://kingdompen.org/members/raevynstar/activity/mentions/ Activity feed mentioning raevynstar. Wed, 22 Apr 2026 18:47:41 -0400 https://buddypress.org/?v= en-US 30 hourly 2 798833e5afa687f0415f4b537d68057c Jessi Rae replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/page/2/#post-47579 Sat, 07 Oct 2017 22:25:11 -0400 @raevynstar Hey! I’d love to read it, but unfortunately life is busy right now. 🙁 I’m really sorry!

]]> 40085f7c49d5fdec94eab35e90f00b09 DelightInLife replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47555 Sat, 07 Oct 2017 16:41:59 -0400 @raevynstar

Welcome to Kingdom’s Pen!

Our family really likes 21 pilots as well! What’s your favorite song by them?

]]> 7296552cf2dd8e94f0300d90788a4ca0 Catwing replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47437 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 22:56:42 -0400 @raevynstar Welcome to the Kingdom of Pen! I am Catwing, Abassador of the catwings of Allore. *throws chocolate* What do you like do besides write?

]]> 605fb35d63134476d19ad1dec544d62e Joseph Darkgrate replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/page/2/#post-47343 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 17:09:58 -0400 I just read it. Overall, I thought it was okay. A few mistakes like a random letter or such. Maybe it’s just my eyes. If you were seriously heading for an unlikable main character, you really achieved it! (not to offend you or anything)

I think it’s pretty good, but what I caught was that occasionally there were gaps or something like that.…[Read more]

]]> bcb62ec073f2b8f6b78c17b9e9547b22 Ingrid replied to the topic Unlikable 12-Year-Old MC in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikablespoiled-12-year-old-mc/#post-47314 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 15:55:25 -0400 @raevynstar
I think you could do one of two things. You could go with what @daeus said and make her completely confident in herself…or you could make her doubt herself and her abilities. Maybe she’s really insecure and doesn’t quite know who she is. Anyway, just some thoughts.

]]> 56eaf8c75cd6120dafe33c4d1a21955b NC Stokes replied to the topic Unlikable 12-Year-Old MC in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikablespoiled-12-year-old-mc/#post-47311 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 15:29:55 -0400 @raevynstar *grins from ear to ear because I loooove The Secret Garden* I found the article really helpful when it comes to my unlikeable characters. It might not be exactly what you’re after, but there are some good points in there. 🙂

]]> f2134fa035fe0bd75649f8547f815ccb Josiah DeGraaf replied to the topic Unlikable 12-Year-Old MC in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikablespoiled-12-year-old-mc/#post-47292 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 13:44:57 -0400 @raevynstar I wrestled through the same question when writing my second book. I think the key is to not make Fiona completely unlikeable. Give her some likeable traits and give the reader some hints that she’s eventually going to change. If you can also give her sympathetic motivations for her unsympathetic actions and show us what sort of things…[Read more]

]]> af7f0dfb5e9d7d8c75b9e986ad01a009 Daeus replied to the topic Unlikable 12-Year-Old MC in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikablespoiled-12-year-old-mc/#post-47286 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 12:37:51 -0400 @raevynstar Confidence is key. A good spoiled brat sees the world in black and white. Their confidence in themselves is unflinching and they don’t consider other ways of looking at things. Such firmness inspires respect, even in fools.

Don’t know if that fits your character, but it’s one thing that works really well.

]]> d92e9252a5038a079917291ca0e18223 Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/#post-47267 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 23:18:34 -0400 @raevynstar I must decline (way too much going on 😉 ), but I hope you get the help you need.

]]> d2b17c50f6eaba2b5b2acbdd3f176713 Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47266 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 23:16:55 -0400 @raevynstar Cool. 🙂 I’m in Southern Ohio.

]]> 6cff49a61d773792227a8aa1a76143b8 EpicAddie2 replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47262 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 22:59:05 -0400 @raevynstar Hi! Welcome to Kingdom Pen! Have you read Harry Potter?

]]> 3d2e4b5b15b0d7a4a01ec9852e124597 Hannah replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/#post-47256 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 22:40:29 -0400 @raevynstar what’s the word count??

]]> 0d9228fb0df086bf13938a3df3d2497a EpicAddie2 replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/#post-47220 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 21:58:09 -0400 @raevynstar Unfortunately, I can’t help. Sorry! Life is really busy right now, and I’m going to beta read @seekjustice‘s book, so I don’t have enough time. *sadness*

]]> 2632144230bed847a387ff4ac60c34e0 Catwing replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/#post-47209 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 21:33:22 -0400 @raevynstar Hi! I am busy so I can’t right now… But a shall tag some people… Perhaps they can help you? …
@emma-flournoy @jessi-Rae @daughteroftheking @epicaddie2 @that_writer_girl_99
@salome01w4g @his-instrument @dragon-snapper @emily @shannon

]]> d087c7d903c425e94e3b70f240c6448f Snapper replied to the topic Is My Main Character Well-Developed? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/is-my-main-character-well-developed/#post-47205 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 21:01:09 -0400 @raevynstar Oh…yeah….that would make a Labrador a problem. 😛

@daeus *dances* Yay! Destruction to telling!

]]> 35aa9f7fe5ecb0174c90d3284d8189c9 katie replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47180 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 19:26:23 -0400 Hi @raevynstar and welcome to KP! 🙂

]]> 5843ff65e771bd71533e5c5da39506cd Elizabeth replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47161 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 18:21:26 -0400 @raevynstar Hello there! Glad you found us! If you have any questions about KP, the forums, or whatever, feel free to ask anyone!

]]> 4db96ae2ff634e3671e236995119af6b NC Stokes replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47160 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 18:20:40 -0400 @raevynstar I’m going to come right out and say it, I saw your profile pic and just about fell out of my chair. 😛 I LOVE TWENTY ONE PILOTS. *insert crazy fan moment here* Ok, now I’ve done that- hello!! Welcome to KP! How’d you hear about us?

]]> 2deca3fb1a4a2eeb7252e0adb8daf886 Emma Flournoy replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47155 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 18:01:45 -0400 @raevynstar Welcome to KP! Where do you live?

@xonos-darkgrate

Yes, humans. Those are the biggest monsters possible for a good story!

That is a huge truth. Humans will ALWAYS be more interesting to read about than any kind of creature. Whether they’re good or bad. 😛

]]> 62207eba524390446f0d98378d9a2501 Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47131 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 15:39:13 -0400 @raevynstar *nods* Totally valid reason. 😉

]]> bef6ee16f0295f94e54ce2b67a0b10b7 Aislinn Mollisong replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47124 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 15:31:20 -0400 Welcome, @raevynstar ! I’m Aislinn, and I hail from the Aetherlight (Xonos does too). I usually write fantasy, but I like the Giver too! Do you like dragons? *please say yes, please say yes*

]]> 4c31c38513c150b93ca9c1ab008b23dc Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47121 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 15:28:16 -0400 @raevynstar heyyyyyy! I’m an INFP too. 😀 Welcome to KP; so glad to have you here. I’m a poet (of sorts 😛 ) as well. Why do you like poetry?

]]> da6df989fcfb41c4758f15810a486127 Josiah DeGraaf replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47119 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 15:26:25 -0400 @raevynstar Welcome to the site! Glad you found us. 🙂 What’s the premise of your current work-in-progress?

]]> db2455c41094deef43a81d900dddaa97 Ingrid replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47109 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 14:34:58 -0400 @raevynstar
Hey there! *tries to think of a good get-to-know-you question* Hmmm…are you a dog or a cat person? 😉

]]> b7ed10429bfbe6ae91a1ac854b2784e2 Daeus replied to the topic Is My Main Character Well-Developed? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/is-my-main-character-well-developed/#post-47086 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 13:09:59 -0400 @raevynstar He sounds good to me. 😀 The one thing I would point out is that sometimes writers will make these types of characters mopey. It’s fine for characters to be sorrowful and introspective, but they must have a strong goal they are pursuing at the same time, or it will be hard to root for them.

@dragon-snapper That’s right. You got it.

]]> 8ae22ac9b0acff782a785a3ad4ba401e Snapper replied to the topic Is My Main Character Well-Developed? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/is-my-main-character-well-developed/#post-47076 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:51:39 -0400 @raevynstar Ooh! He does sound like a great character. For someone who controls fire, he doesn’t sound like very much of a fighter, which I think is great, because when someone thinks fire, they think of a fighter. Nice and unique, that one. *thumbs up*
If you want to improve him, I’d discover some of his quirks. What does he do when he’s…[Read more]

]]> 793e1d65d45ec668db6d6285ecea77eb Hannah replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47074 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:50:43 -0400 @raevynstar ooooh 21 pilots… I don’t like rappy stuff so I only listen to there none rappy stuff but they’re neat!
Welcome to the realm … oh wait dragon-snapper said that already… oh well (Oh by the way @dragon-snapper .. she’s notorious for melting chairs, 😉 )
What country are you from?
Oh and the Giver is the best, and I’m 16 as well! 🙂

]]> 623de9b854d8706215891fe3a1f96a5e Rolena Hatfield replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47069 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:44:52 -0400 @raevynstar Welcome to Kingdom Pen! I’m just venturing into the Sci-fi genre. 🙂

Do you have any pets and what’s your favorite kind of ice cream?

]]> d3a421084fe8f059731408298f506d25 Joseph Darkgrate replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47067 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:39:20 -0400 Hey, @raevynstar. I’m new here too.
I really like science fiction and poetry as well, (among other things), but if you’ve ever heard of Michael Crichton than you can consider me one of his fans.

I only listen to TWO Twenty One pilots songs. (I’m picky about what I listen to).
Anyways, when @daeus asked you about your personality types, he meant…[Read more]

]]> e9da3dd1a05bac0df705235fa9985f29 Snapper replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47066 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:39:13 -0400 @raevynstar Ah, hiatus. I suppose those are good from time to time. What kind of sci-fi is it? (star warsy/star treky or I Robot-y or something else)?

]]> 899bfd5ebaa1e6abb632551382d577ee Snapper replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47062 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:35:46 -0400 @raevynstar Hi! Welcome to our realm!

SCIENCE FICTION! Finally, someone else who writes sci-fi! Do you have a WIP?

]]> 5babd0981061cabf3e2404cf45088641 Kylie replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47061 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:35:14 -0400 @raevynstar Welcome to Kingdom pen!! What are your favorite books?

]]> 21b1316e97c98817fabdae846da4b4f0 Daeus replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47060 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:32:18 -0400 @raevynstar Hi Raevyn. Welcome to the bestistest place on the internet.

It’s always cool to meet other poets out there. You’ll have to share one of your pomes with us sometime.

Btw, do you know what your personality type is?

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