Kingdom Pen | raevynstar | Activity https://kingdompen.org/members/raevynstar/activity/ Activity feed for raevynstar. Wed, 22 Apr 2026 18:47:41 -0400 https://buddypress.org/?v= en-US 30 hourly 2 d303709c545bd7642e26f823a2e3ab8a raevynstar replied to the topic Is My Main Character Well-Developed? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/is-my-main-character-well-developed/#post-47770 Tue, 10 Oct 2017 22:23:12 -0400 Bumping/resurfacing this thread to ask one more question.

Will it bother readers if the male MC (the one this thread is about, lol) is smaller and weaker than the female MC? It makes senseโ€”the girl (named Iris) grew up as a warrior/soldier, so sheโ€™d have to be strong…
But I donโ€™t want readers to abandon my book because of this detail!

]]> b5ee49371bb9e7f33b48c2f448083ee2 raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47580 Sat, 07 Oct 2017 23:35:36 -0400 March To The Sea! Or Kitchen Sink.

]]> f3e6e8ef0a17d0f677d06214a757a6c3 raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47554 Sat, 07 Oct 2017 16:12:44 -0400 I enjoy reading and cooking.

]]> 1e56ae67306dec8f426f6bf10362b2d1 raevynstar replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/page/2/#post-47334 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 16:59:05 -0400 @salome01w4g, any time.
@xonos-darkgrate, https://docs.google.com/document/d/10s-ZbFiyZpzw7VMkC9uuV-o5RtEjc6NW1cj9kWu-yok/edit?usp=sharing

]]> a0f26c4725f6e2538b850a96af419989 raevynstar replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/#post-47323 Fri, 06 Oct 2017 16:23:45 -0400 Yes, that’s fine. ๐Ÿ™‚

]]> 1f259dedb2d5f33e03e3e003d8432d59 raevynstar started the topic Unlikable 12-Year-Old MC in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/unlikablespoiled-12-year-old-mc/ Fri, 06 Oct 2017 12:27:41 -0400 In my secondary project, which is realistic/Christian fiction, the main character, Fiona, is…unlikable at first. To say the least. She’s not evil, but she’s petty, spoiled, and judgemental.
This book is a retelling of The Secret Garden, so you know she’s going to be redeemed. ๐Ÿ˜‰ But how do I keep readers invested in such a whiny brat’s point of…[Read more]

]]> aacbce67fda6e332e271a681c9e8f80a raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47263 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 23:08:35 -0400 Yes. ๐Ÿ™‚

]]> 9cb89ae44f6c7d863997e5afc8699d26 raevynstar replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/#post-47261 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 22:52:43 -0400 2828 words so far.

]]> e0c05790f637d758ea4faa7f963926b6 raevynstar replied to the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/#post-47241 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 22:20:38 -0400 Thatโ€™s okay! ๐Ÿ™‚
@shannon, Iโ€™ll have to figure out how to PM you. Is a google doc okay?

]]> 1c5810a4223017df1cd27c280d11f2c4 raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/3/#post-47164 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 18:24:57 -0400 @daughteroftheking, I’m not entirely sure. lol. I guess I just stumbled across this group by chance.

]]> eaacbd560fd3859d7269dd73c2203e4d raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47157 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 18:05:25 -0400 @emma-flournoy, North Central Pennsylvania.

]]> e9a9fa9368ba722397813a8b54a91497 raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47127 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 15:33:11 -0400 @aislinn-mollisong, occasionally. I prefer writing about other fantasy creatures, though.

]]> 4506cd71e5db2640af1110ecc653b0f0 raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47126 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 15:32:29 -0400 @aratrea, I don’t have a proper description yet. *I* know what it’s about, but it’s hard to describe, lol.

@kate-flournoy, it allows me to express my emotions in a relatively-easy (for me) manner. ๐Ÿ˜€

]]> 93726235bd1ed56b7bcf6c7b2a0e4a2b raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/page/2/#post-47112 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 15:01:42 -0400 Both, leaning slightly more towards cats.

]]> 7a93b93d734859bdcbd6804de2933a33 raevynstar replied to the topic Is My Main Character Well-Developed? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/is-my-main-character-well-developed/#post-47098 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 14:04:28 -0400 Thanks! ๐Ÿ˜€
Everything that you two said is very helpful. As for the question about a Labrador…most animals are extinct in this book, lol.

Now I wish I could continue writing this book, instead of my school-assigned realistic fiction project. ๐Ÿ™ Soon…

]]> a5e62366f81207137be34bc587b4d366 raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47075 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:51:17 -0400 The US.

]]> 4caa9c221e3f2b553fcc4d6759817f0b raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47070 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:45:52 -0400 Lois Lowry! ๐Ÿ˜€

]]> ca5fab18b32216696284f9430238de9a raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47068 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:41:20 -0400 @dragon-snapper, it’s a dystopian/post-apocalyptic novel. ๐Ÿ™‚

]]> 43c268b4523f3b3b4c3503c7ac944252 raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47064 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:36:51 -0400 And, yes, I have a sci-fi WIP…but it’s on hiatus right now. ๐Ÿ™

]]> 3150932d512a6e960dbb4e5944a104bd raevynstar replied to the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/#post-47063 Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:36:18 -0400 My personality type is INFP. ๐Ÿ™‚

My favorite books besides the Bible are “The Giver” and “The Crucible”.

]]> 81756e332cca8b6c5d267d7c5343ddf6 raevynstar started the topic Is My Main Character Well-Developed? in the forum Characters http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/is-my-main-character-well-developed/ Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:23:52 -0400 I really like the MC from my dystopian novel (which is on hiatus, but I’ll get back to it eventually). But, of course, I’m biased. Here’s the short-ish bio I wrote last night. What could I improve about the character? Any advice is appreciated! ๐Ÿ™‚

Carson โ€œCoveโ€ Hartford

Maleโ€”15โ€”ISFJ
Birth date: June 6th, 35 PWT (post-war time)

I am cold, c…[Read more]

]]> e49fe33c6807b1efe9acb6b381b57405 raevynstar started the topic Looking For Critique Of Realistic Middle-Grade Book in the forum Novel Critique Requests http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/looking-for-critique-of-realistic-middle-grade-book/ Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:19:50 -0400 -it’s called Green Gardens
-I don’t have much written so far.
-it’s a Christian novel for early teens
-it involves a small town and an unlikable (at first) main character
-it’s lowkey a retelling of The Secret Garden

]]> 3e8a6ca3c7aa208b841b1114e69bedb5 raevynstar started the topic Hello! in the forum Start HERE http://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/hello-12/ Thu, 05 Oct 2017 12:16:46 -0400 My name is Raevyn. I’m a sixteen-year-old writer; my main genres are science fiction and poetry.
In case my profile picture doesn’t make it obvious, I’m really into Twenty One Pilots! ๐Ÿ˜€

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