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this was another good section. I feel like you’re really sinking into a good style and voice with this. I had a slight problem with one sentence though.

When Immanuel came, the laws God previously had placed changed.

I don’t see that in the Bible. If anything, the laws were reinforced more strongly. (You have heard it said do not commit adu…[Read more]

@rae oooh! His old friend came to stay where he was, that’s nice!

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Dante

For probably the tenth time since they first met, Dante was thankful that Alpha seemed to consider him a friend, or at least someone who wasn’t a threat.

He laughed nervously. “Uhh, no. I haven’t heard anything. Do you… normally go around stabbing people in the gut? I mean, I get the boredom thing, but there are less bloody ways to…[Read more]

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Hmm. I’ve written some fight scenes, but am not overly satisfied with them. I just make the characters bang their blades around for a bit until I feel it is time to make someone win. I did a little bit of research on sword fighting to improve it a bit.

I like @whalekeeper‘s advice though, about using surroundings to both hinder and help…[Read more]

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I really wish i could draw like that.

Giiirrl, stop roasting yourself. Thank you, though!

@liberty @rae @theshadow

Awww thank you so much!!!!!! <333

@rae

Thanks for the article! Unfortunately I’m not very good at fight scenes either, so I won’t be much help. 🙁

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@rae yeah idk what’s wrong with me

but hey, that was a great chapter!

@rae that was awesome!

“Finally a fellow you like, and he’s a possible assassin.” Dr. Handel shook his head. “I will never understand a girls’ attractions.

Neither do I, and I’m a girl who the only fellow she likes is a (fortunately fictional) assassin too, apparently.

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I will be more annoyed if you save people who need to die for character arc or story purposes.

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and Baron goes for it. 🤣🤣 that was the bluntest declaration of love I’ve seen in a while. 😆

Good section. One of your best, honestly. I’m starting to really feel your characters!

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oh man, Alpha and Dante together are amazing!! 🤣

Dante and the twins are so much funner to read about too!! I feel like I can really envision them better know that I’ve met their author in real life. Funny how that happens.

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Lol, I would love to read that. I’m cool with my characters leaving.

@rae yeah we’ll just have to wait until everyone else agrees to have their characters leave.

@rae haha now I want to have a scene of just the two of them

hey, maybe they’ll be the last two around the fire? Like everyone else decides they’re knackered and go off to their cabins, and then Silvanus and Sniper are the only two left and are kinda forced to talk to each other.

lol that conversation would get crazy. Especially since the…[Read more]

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Dante

Dante stared at the knife for a long moment, not responding. It stabbed through his coat sleeve, pinning it to the door. Once his heartbeat slowed back down, he let out a deep breath and pulled out the knife.

“Nah, just nicked me,” he said, casually handing it back to Alpha.

He then took off his coat, showing the shallow cut on his…[Read more]

@rae lolll Silvanis and Fairy are worse than Huntress and Sniper.

Dante

“Banned for life! Ya got that? Show your face around here again and I’m calling the cops!”

Dante Tucker found himself being forcefully thrown out of a shop at seven in the morning and into the street. A poorly trimmed bush by the sidewalk broke his fall.

“… One-eyed freak.”

The front door slammed behind him.

Dante picked himself u…[Read more]