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@rae

Ok, first, before all the cool stuff, I’ll introduce the standard Shome’el sword and shield:

There isn’t much to say about the sword, but I like the design. As for the shield (front and side profile) It is designed with a curved body, that forms a kind of pseudo roof. This is because of the nature of Omialia being in a space of…[Read more]

@rae

My, my! 😃 I really like the way you write.

@rae

Cool! That’s a really cool concept. Crystal swords as an idea has always felt a little fantasy cliché to me, but the mechanic you built into it is actually really intriguing! It’s kind of like a memory metal (is that what it’s based off of), but it disappears instead of getting distorted, so that’s a really powerful material. Just make sure…[Read more]

@rae

Ohh, cool topic! Can I share some of my fantasy weapons on here?

@rae

Hey! Definitely, an interesting topic. I’m debating on doing a warrior style story for next month’s nanowrimo. But we’ll see.

I really like the idea of warriors that are trained from youth to fight great battles. I think warrior stories are great ways to include moral values and examples of great and poor character.

@rae

Wait…I just saw you like purple and blue…Purple is my fAVORITE COLOR! Ever since I can remember.

YES, it’s such a beautiful, versatile color. It can be rich and simple all at once.

I adore cats too, but horses steal my heart. I own seven cats at the moment.

My family only has one, lol, because my dad’s allergic. She’s such a sweetie tho…[Read more]

@rae

This is okay a little bit and in some places (for instance I think it was well-used in the scene where Lilitu was telling Sef his dream) but eventually, and in some places, it just gets annoying and interrupts a read.

Okay, got it! I agree I definitely overused those in this segment.

@whalekeeper

Also about the critique on…

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@savannah_grace2009

😂😂😂 I feel that, lol

Boys are….boys.

Ikr?? And the problem is they can’t take a hint. Chances are, I’m going to have to straight up tell him no. I’m friends with his sister and he’s like a little brother to me, so… just no 😅

That’s me when I’ve been writing for too long…

It’s a mood 🤣

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@rae @mineralizedwritings @esther-c

Here’s a new scene I’m working on. Thoughts? Concerns?

She ran across the prairie. She didn’t know where she was going, and she didn’t care. Running helped her to forget…to forget last night, and all the other nights like it.

“Scream all you want…ain’t nobody gonna here you…” she could still feel the welts…

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@rae

Yep!

@acancello

Heyyy!

Hi!! I’m so sorry I haven’t been on in forever (Maybe its only been like 3 days, but still a long time 🙂 ) So… I have been crazy, crazy busy. Like, I even went to my first barn dance in my new town and there were almost 100 high schoolers🤯 Personally I love to hang out with people so I went without knowing anyon…

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@rae

Thats what I was thinking…

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @rae @acancello @mineralizedwritings @esther-c

I’m fine with it, but I haven’t dabbled in fantasy/medieval writing very much so I might not be as active in the RP. Howeverrrr I’ve read some, so hopefully I won’t get stuck too much lol. Kari’s a big reader/writer, so she’s already kinda wondering if she stepped through a…[Read more]

@rae here is a critique from the tactical geek. 🫡

“one teen who didn’t know the skill of at least one weapon well”

“He had no weapons”

“and not able to do anything for lack of a weapon”

One of the important principles in fighting knowhow is that everything is a weapon. From the belt and shoes on your body, the phone of computer you are r…[Read more]

@rae

Um this post isn’t working so I’m going to send it in two parts to see if that helps.

Part 1:

I’m still only halfway through chapter two. Haven’t really found the time to read the whole thing though. But anyway here’s some thoughts:

This chapter is a lot easier to read for me since it’s no longer in italics and I hope you keep writing it…[Read more]

@rae @grcr

Oh, Rae, I meant just the next POV for the current RP! But that’s fine, it would be fun to do a new one!

We could have it so the characters at the “party” get teleported to the world via the house’s magical powers. Lol. I know that sounds stupid…but I kind of don’t want to start over, I think it would be fun if the story continues,…[Read more]

@euodia-vision @freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6 @mineralizedwritings @savannah_grace2009 @rae @spinner4him @smiley @grcr @hybridlore @whalekeeper @anyone-else-that-might-be-interesed

Ok… I’m so excited because I’m finally sharing my WIP idea for NaNo!!!

I think it’s the only WIP that I’ve actually put a lot of thought into before actually…[Read more]

@rae

If you don’t mind me giving my opinion, I think the second idea sounds cool! 😄