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Esther replied to the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 7 months ago
@liberty @keilah-h @theducktator @hybridlore
Ok! So I’m not posting this as soon as I wanted, lol, but this is the almost final draft and I’d like your thoughts again if y’all are willing.
I didn’t change any of the tenses or add words because I wanted it to sound very “in the moment” if that makes sense. I did add a couple of things that hopefu…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Okay I can change that. It won’t do anything to the plot.
Lol 😂😂 I like Roland
haha, me too.
Poor Leon. He is now stuck with two impulsive companions.
Also, I’m starting to see the personality differences between Julian and Leon and I love them 😍
ME TOO!!!!!
Just out of curiosity and to see if I’m getting everything across, w…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
He’s my favorite so I want him to die.
No wonder you kill off so many characters. 😅
🖋️Official KP Psychopath✒️
Lolol
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Good section!
Roland, I in no way want to go against God’s will, but are you sure?” Leon asked.
Roland nodded.
When I read this, I thought that maybe Leon and Julian should have prayed about it before letting him come with them.
Roland shook his head in disgust. “I have a mind to smash it,” he muttered.
“Whoa, whoa, whoa,” Le…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
no, it makes perfect sense.
He’s an awesome character and I wanna see him more.
He’s my favorite so I want him to die.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
That’s not his only chapter, just the next one when he appears… I think.
He also needs to die.
That sounds contradictory, lol.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
WHAT! NO!! A character like Alec needs a lot more spotlight!!!
He also needs to die.
I WANNA READ CHAPTER 13!!
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Thanks!! I’m glad it’s working, I honestly don’t even know what I did lol. Warrain is based a lot on Overwatch, which I’ve played a lot before, so maybe it’s coming from experience and that’s how. (It’s still a very different game though.)
I sure like Cole.
When’s Alec coming back? he was my favorite!! *puppy whimper*
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Syph
Ball room? He’s seen something, a large sign on his way to school. But now, that had said Ball Pit. Surely they weren’t the same thing. How was one supposed to dance in a ball room?
Wildly. He could do that.
“Tonight. Oi, that is agreeable.”
Although he’s have to find this Room of Balls too. The misty whisp tightened…[Read more]
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Andrew replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Rax and Ben
Rax was excited when he heard Eddie’s response. “Great! Wonderful!” You could never see a smile as big on anyone’s face as on Rax’s. He was filled with joy, for he liked dancing, even though he had only danced formally once or twice, but that made him more excited that he would dance formally again. And to top it…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
That sounds like an insane amount of fun. XD
My experience is just jumping around the house to Celtic music with my siblings.
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Loopy replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
@koshka That dancing sounds cool! I thought of Irish dance when you said his dancing was competitive. And I love that his water magic is part of it.
I used to take Irish dance lessons when I was little *cue nostalgic flashbacks of me being a clumsy child*
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Loopy replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Ellie
Eddie didn’t hesitate. “Yes! I’d love to go with you!”
Ellie looked up in surprise. They had only known these guys for about a minute and a half. Ed was grinning and her tail flicked in excitement. She shot her sister a quick triumphant look, similar to whenever she won when they played video games. Then, just as quick…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!!
Sorry I’m late. Busy today. But, I think it’s a little longer than normal. 🙂
“Thank you so much for the meal, Liesl. It was wonderful,” Julian said.
Liesl smiled. “I’m glad you liked it.”
“So, what are we doing today?” Roland asked. A…
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Aww, thank you! *He turns bright blue and bows*
The water Sprites dance is like what you’d get if you mixed ballet and Irish folk/cog dancing, with the added effects of water swirls following their every command. They move the water, and the water moves them.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
great progress!!!
I love this chapter! You really suck me into the game planning which is great because I normally find scenes like this super boring in books. It’s crazy but whatever you did has made it so that I can completely picture the game!!
I sure like Cole.
When’s Alec coming back? he was my favorite!! *puppy…[Read more]
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Andrew replied to the topic Writing Fight Scenes in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
I wrote it seriously, but looking back at it it’s kinda funny, lol. I’m glad you found it funny
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Enid replied to the topic Writing Fight Scenes in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 7 months ago
Lolll, funny, but legit too
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