Ruth

@the_lost-journal aww cute!

It’s spelling “quacking” not “quaking” but that’s all right.

@esther-c @loopylin I’ve avoided Discord for as long as possible (I don’t even remember the reason why) but everyone keeps bringing up reasons that I should have it lol. Never heard of Slack.

@theshadow lolllllll

that’s gonna be weird

@theshadow

It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

@freed_and_redeemed

Love it!!

Also was not expecting Erich! I need to know how he joined the American army!!!

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Interesting POV switch. A new technique I tried out for telling long stories rather then having a ton of first-person dialogue. Let me know what y’all think.

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
September 9th
The Empire<…

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@theshadow

Oooo!! I like this!! This is getting good!

And, what if, what if we don’t make it?

This is a little cluncky because of the punctuation. If you did: “And what if–– what if we don’t make it?” or “And what if. . . what if we don’t make it?” either of those would work well. Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrif…[Read more]

@keilah-h

@hybridlore

Thanks you two.

As for online, I don’t trust it. I’ve heard and seen too many online things get hacked for my liking. 😅

Thanks for the suggestion though!

@keilah-h

*Grins and steeples fingers together*

Ah, a KaPeefer finally asked this most interesting of questions…

XD

Short story: “Fork the Gork!” Is a rally cry from one of my sister’s books (her Beliriegn children’s story, if she ever talks about it on here). Certain characters tend to use it with conjunction with their own battle cry “Fork…[Read more]

@esther-c I like that idea.

We could also do Discord. It’s really great for organizing and customizing things. We could have different channels that are like the different topics, and we could even set up something similar to the Bumbling Henchman/ Chosen One/ ect. titles

Or if we can’t do Slack find another free platform where we can have separate channels/forums to keep everything organized

I’m half-tempted just to create our own Slack community at this point. Since (i think) we all trust each other. And then only people we know can get in (no more stalkers XP).

Because if KP was just abandoned, then we’ve got our own little writing community that will live on

Idk 🤷🏻‍♀️ Just an idea…

@keilah-h

Yes XD

@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty @whalekeeper @linus-smallprint

New chapter, please tear into this.

Chapter 4

Dylan stopped abruptly, “Where’s the path?”
“What do you mean ‘where’s the path’?” Olivia shoved past Elina and Jack, gazing out ahead. A seemingly endless sea of trees met her.

“Oh, great, nic…[Read more]

@koshka true, true.

btw what exactly is a gork?

@keilah-h

Perhaps not, but it would be interesting to see what people noticed it.

@grcr

About his eyes on fire, is it more of just his irises or is it the whole thing?

Whole eye on fire pls

And what colors do you want his clothes to be?

I don’t really know to be honest. Whatever normal raggy clothes have in color. (sry that’s not really helpful)

@dekreel

Aw, thank you!! That made my day!! 🥹☺️💛

@theducktator oh yeah

I don’t remember the aftermath that well. I remember the storm (thankfully our house wasn’t damaged) but not about what went on afterward.

@keilah-h

That one.

@theducktator yeah I’m in Florida. The one that hit last year in October?