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@koshka

*Does a little dance* Descriptions are sometimes the bane of my existence because you never know if they’re coming across.

And I promise bullying isn’t the majority of Lucille’s childhood experience. There are actually so many things I want to write about for her, and many things are more cheerful and interesting.

@elishavet-pidyon

She’s my favorite, may I have mercy on her soul. XD

I think I like her dad. Is he Dali?

Yes, he’s Dali. I call Lucille’s mum by her name as well. It feels more humanizing to call him that in this story rather than calling him ‘her dad’ or Dad.

I also found her description of her hair fascinating. Is it just metaphor, or does it…

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@whalekeeper

*Gasp*

Wow. I like Lucille Barnes. The whole scene was beautiful to read, although I’d like to slap a few kids silly. The descriptions were clear and lovely.

Poor Lucille.

@hybridlore     @koshka     @keilah-h       @elishavet-pidyon       @theducktator     @grcr   @whalekeeper

Theme song for Jonathan in current stage of arc and somewhat forward.

@ellette-giselle @theducktator @linus-smallprint @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Two new chapters!

@whalekeeper

Wow. Poor Lucille.

@ellette-giselle

Got it.

@hybridlore

Oh, I forgot that chapter ended there. 🙃

Yeah, they’ve turned in plenty of people. For Jonathan’s parents it was more Agent retaliation. We’re here to pick up the kid. You don’t have the kid? Fine, you pay for it. That sort of thing.

@ellette-giselle

Jim giving Jonathan shoes. It was a sweet ending.

Ohh, right. But other people, maybe.

@hybridlore

what was sweet?

No, the gang was not involved in that one. They were killed because they hid Jonathan.

@ellette-giselle

:] Mayhaps I will post more when desire returns.

@ellette-giselle

Aww. That was sweet.

Jim seemed nicer to Jonathan before these chapters, but I guess Jonathan was hidden and Jim didn’t have to worry about the others watching.

Did the gang have something to do with Jonathan’s parents dying?

@loopylin

Is Enid your friend?

“Yeah, she’s… yeah.”

No, I’ve never been on one of those. We have cars and, like, normal buses.

“Huh. At first I was going to say that sounds tedious, but I can’t talk like that when sky trams are so undependable.”

What do the buildings in your city look like?

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@whalekeeper

woah! That was crazy!

Thanks for sharing!!!

I hesitated for like ten minutes before pushing the submit button. I don’t know how some of you guys do this regularly. :’-)

@loopylin @rae @koshka @ellette-giselle @theducktator

Yaay, I actually have a self-contained snippet to share. This is pre-teen Barnes, in case you’re not sure who she is.

The typewriter clicked to a stop, its keys fluttering up and down like the legs of an overturned insect. Lucille opened her eyes. The sun glared through her eyelashes, turning…

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@loopylin

and now I’m really sad but also weirdly motivated to get some writing done.

Be sad then!! *Shakes you to make you write more* I need a Lois x Fel scene as soon as you can deliver.

@hybridlore     @koshka     @keilah-h       @elishavet-pidyon       @theducktator     @grcr   @whalekeeper

NEXT CHAPTERS!!!