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@hybridlore

Yay! I’m glad you liked it! Yep, Jonathan and Michael are back!

@ellette-giselle

Yay! Jonathan and Michael are back!!

These were great chapters. I can’t wait for 618 (Rory?) to meet the rebellion. (I’m assuming that will happen, anyway.)

@liberty, I think they were your comments? I really hope you’re wrong about Michael dying. 🥺😢

@liberty

lol. Well good.

@ellette-giselle

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

Ah, right! I forgot about that. Neat!

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

Nope, it’s actually the opposite. I was so impressed by how realistic it all sounded.

@liberty

Ooo yay! So glad!

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

@ellette-giselle

I went through all six chapters! I’m thoroughly enjoying the story! I’m excited to see Cassion appear.

By the way, how much research did you do for all the jet tech stuff? Did you actually look into all those terms they talked about?  Especially Jason’s engineering talk…

I was going to share my thoughts, but then this thread would start to become redundant, lol! I pretty much agree with what everyone else has said. And as for the passage people keep referencing about food offered to idols and becoming a stumbling block, that’s 1 Corinthians 8.

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore @liberty

TWO MORE NEW CHAPTERS. FOUR IN TOTAL TODAY.

And goodnight.

@theducktator
I’m glad you’re happy with Evan’s board. How is Evan the duck btw?

Sounds good! I’ll be looking forward to sunday comments!

@ellette-giselle

Hooray! Evan got a board! Some of the quotes on Jason’s remind me of my grandfather. He’s an engineer. XD I like Cassion already, though his Romanesque name in a dystopia is messing with my brain. XD With school, work, and dance starting, I likely won’t be as consistent with this book. You may get a week’s worth of comments each…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I listen to rock and metal sometimes

Someone made a heavy metal version of  The Pirates Who Don’t Do Anything. It’s awesome. XD

@theshadow

I don’t usually listen to rock, rap, (except Hamilton. I love Hamilton), or pop, but I LOVE jazz. (I’m listening to Frank Sinatra as I write this). I’d chalk this up with the food questions in w…[Read more]

@koshka    @keilah-h     @elishavet-pidyon     @theducktator    @grcr     @whalekeeper    @power     @hybridlore   @liberty

TWO NEW CHAPTERS. Possibly more later.

Oh cheese and crackers, now I’m worried everyone’s gonna think I’m a horrible person

I just released that band might cause you pain to look up because the Google search makes them look satanic. 😅😭 They do not worship a demon, point blank, and I can explain that if need be.

@theshadow

Hey! 🙂 I haven’t thought about this in a long time, but I agree with everyone else on this thread. Just because a genre of music has been used to spread bad messages does not mean the genre itself is bad.

Take jazz, for example. There are many different jazz songs, and these songs have been the backdrop for cozy, peaceful memories…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Thank you very much!

That was really helpful about the description thing. I think that makes more sense. I wonder too if I over-did the “buzz” words in dystopian literature because I was trying to cut down on description. XD I’ll totally look at that.

Hmmm, that’s interesting what you are saying aboyt the Christianity thing.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Some of the characters had very compelling characteristics, like Jim’s human decency and Evan with his likable dialogue. They all served their roles and were decently memorable. Jonathan was my favorite because he was the POV…[Read more]

@keilah-h

He’s one of the villains.

-he has a pet crow or raven

Actually, I wasn’t thinking of it like that…but that makes a lot of sense. Okay, I’ll add this to the story!

Yes! You are correct!

@hybridlore

Wow, it looks great! But this seems like a sad character or a villain. 😢

Yup. But thankfully…something good happens.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m trying to fill out these feedback questions before I lose track of what’s happening. *Types furiously*

Someone suggested I cut the last section of the blurb and leave it with the part about Jonathan’s friendship because it has more of a cliffhanger. What do you think?

I say remove the part about tragedy striking, and only…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Wow!! That was fast!

Okay awesome! I’d love to see your answers to the questions!

Hmm, I guessed you might be the one to bring that up. I think we both have different beliefs on this in general, but if there are some things you want to talk about, then I’m willing to listen. I think it may end up one of those impasses like…[Read more]