PrincesaChronicle22

@theshadow

You’re good!!!! Haha thanks for wanting to read it!!!

@everyone

Thanks for reading this because it keeps me from slacking off when people are expecting new chapters XD

@ellette-giselle

Ok, the last section on the first page was good, but when Aaron is telling Turin about how sin entered the world and when Christ lived for us, I think someone learning about it would ask one or two more questions to understand it better. Other than that, it was good. I have to go help my brother now with something, so I will read…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Sorry, I have been slacking with giving feedback lately. Summer is really getting ahead of me lol. I will try to give you feedback today after I read over the sections you posted.

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks so much for tagging me!! Sorry I haven’t been keeping up, summer has been a little crazy XD. Thank you for the link to the chapters too, that’s so nice! I’ll try to catch up as soon as possible.

Chapter 13

Decay

“Sssef! I’m not paying you to ssstand there doing nothing,” the Pythonos’s voice carried, snapping her back to attention.

“Yes sir,” she lowered her head, her cheeks flushing with embarrassment as her fellow workers all looked up from their work.

Shaking her head to clear her thoughts, she turned back to the pile of trash. I…[Read more]

@rae

I don’t think anyone was saying that you need to change Chase. Like Loopy and Whaley said, it’s not bad that he has that flaw, because he’s a flawed character that grows and changes in your story. We were just concerned that you were portraying him as more of a hero and that flaw was celebrated.

@whalekeeper @loopylin correct me if I’m wrong…XD

@whalekeeper

Hahaha 🤣🤣🤣

@whalekeeper

Oo I want some Doctor Who pjs

I’ve been watching the old black and white doctor who from the 60s like a true nerd.

Btw, if you watch the rest, you should probably stop after the eleventh doctor. The twelfth doctor is alright too, but he’s where the show starts to go downhill.

@whalekeeper

than I will

wait, now I’m curious, do you have a southern accent?

Hehe

@theducktator

Your signature is a mood.

Also I can ask your character a few questions if you want

@whalekeeper

Thanks girl, that makes me feel a lot better 💗💗💗

You’re the best Whaley!!! <3

You literally ALWAYS know what to say!!! (:

*then

Also I’ve been binge watching doctor who so that’s probably what’s filling up the story portion of my brain

@whalekeeper

Nah, you’re good. Take your time. I haven’t been in a rp writing mood or an artistic mood at all recently. Work and social activities have been draining all my energy.

@whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009
XD I’m glad I’m actually making some sense

@whaley

I can understand why it’s tempting to write a character getting their way though.

Maybe it’s because we relate to our own characters so much? And we like getting what we want.

But that’s also how God judges people.
“Your will be done.”

But idk I haven’t t…[Read more]

@rae
Just to clarify, I think that Chase having that flaw makes him a good and realistic character. I’m not critiquing his flaw, I’m critiquing that it’s being shown as a virtue.

Okay but actually….any of you guys that have read my book…

is it too dark??

I’m being legit…cuz now I’m scared…

not to take the focus off Whaley but all these concerns about stories being dark has got me paranoid

@whalekeeper @loopylin

Girl are you psychic or something? Because I couldn’t figure out exactly how I felt about Chase’s sacrifice until you just voiced it.

Exactly!!!! XD XD

@rae

Okay…after reading it again and reading the other’s comments…

I completely agree with @whaley and @loopy.

Chase has always kind of bothered me for the exact reason that Loopy said, but I couldn’t put it into words until I saw her post.

It doesn’t ever seem like he’s being “kind” because all it is is him beating himself up and feeling…[Read more]