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@liberty @keilah-h @theducktator @hybridlore

Ok! So I’m not posting this as soon as I wanted, lol, but this is the almost final draft and I’d like your thoughts again if y’all are willing.

I didn’t change any of the tenses or add words because I wanted it to sound very “in the moment” if that makes sense. I did add a couple of things that hopefu…[Read more]

@koshka That dancing sounds cool! I thought of Irish dance when you said his dancing was competitive. And I love that his water magic is part of it.

I used to take Irish dance lessons when I was little *cue nostalgic flashbacks of me being a clumsy child*

@koshka @raxforge

Ellie

Eddie didn’t hesitate. “Yes! I’d love to go with you!”

Ellie looked up in surprise. They had only known these guys for about a minute and a half. Ed was grinning and her tail flicked in excitement. She shot her sister a quick triumphant look, similar to whenever she won when they played video games. Then, just as quick…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

And Ed (except her hair is in a ponytail)

this is Ellie

@raxforge Just realized I never told you what my characters look like.

So they’re both aliens, but look mostly human except for their tails and some other features. They’re about 14-15yrs old (I haven’t really decided still), but they might look even younger because they’re only a little over 3 feet tall.

I’ll post some drawings too.

Also, I…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

That makes sense. I bet you’re really good at writing villains lol

Despite acting like he has a death wish, though, Dante doesn’t actually want to make Alpha any more angry than he is now. He doesn’t hate Alpha at all or want to hurt him. He took the knife because he was scared, and would have tried to defend himself if Alpha…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@grcr

LOL I love these parts. 💛💛

Aww, thanks! 🥰 Me too 🤪

Would you want to write this differently… ? before I saw the “she drew out her name” part, my mind read it that she spelled it out. (Maybe I’m just crazy…?)

I don’t knowww 😭 I’ve seen it written like that in books before, but I feel like if I changed it to italics it would carry a differe…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle Do you really kill off that many characters? XD

I would’ve gone for the photo. Nothing like a good photo to hold hostage. 😉

I guess my brain just doesn’t work like that. How could that be helpful?

Bro, I was literally like smashing the submit button and it took forever for that response to post 🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@savannah_grace2009

My story is not a lighthearted, hopeful story, at least in the beginning. Right now it’s supposed to be “depressing” and dark. Honestly, to add sprinkles of hope in wouldn’t work for what’s going to happen in the next few chapters. Because right now, none of my characters know God, and so without God there is no hope. I want to…

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@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@rae

a picture from a couple years back of him and Nar having a flour fight (he lost)

Aww cute <3

Hopefully Dante isn’t too upset.

Hehe, no, upset isn’t quite the right word. My boy’s got issues.

Dante

Dante slumped to the ground, holding his throat and coughing. He sat there a while in the dimly lit hall, shoulders shaking as he tried to reg…[Read more]