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@ellette-giselle

Wow. Yup, Green Beret. He did die in the Middle East, but I don’t think it specified a place or operation.

@koshka

I KNOW! When I was reading that I was like, “No way! This is what happened to –––” Except I don’t think Drew Carter’s dad died in Dessert Storm. And was he Special Forces?

@ellette-giselle

That sounds a lot like Cloak of Light.

@esther-c

XD Well good! Glad it was helpful. Don’t worry too much over the whole “Gracious but this draft needs so much work” problem. You’ve already put in a ton of work and learned so much just to get to this point in the drafting process. You can do this! It’s worth it. (plus, hey, we’re all in this thing too…writer’s are crazy)

Just goes to…

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@esther-c

Glad it was helpful. I have a possible idea for something that you could try for option three.

We knew a kid who was trying to go straight. His dad was Special Forces and died in Dessert Storm. His dad’s best friend was kind of a mentor to him tho and was trying to fill in as a father figure. None of them were Christian’s at this…[Read more]

And I would like to throw in something that might be totally unrelated to what you’re dealing with, but it was a bit of a shock to me and had me seriously rethinking how I address certain topics in my books.

(Warning. Mentions of suicide.)

In my recent Psychology class we discussed aproaches to suicide awareness, and the results were mildly…[Read more]

@esther-c

This is a very good question.

But I suppose it comes down to what the reader sees is going on and what the character sees–and those don’t have to be the same. In this case, shouldn’t be.

I’m in the middle of rereading Screwtape Letters. One of the letters tells about how that sin has pleasure attached, and how that pleasure actually…[Read more]

@esther-c

Hi Esther. I actually had something similar to deal with in one of my books as well. Here are the two things I would say to keep in mind that will most likely make the difference.

1. There can be a time where the MC believes a lie as long as it is shown to be a lie by the end of the book. (i.e. There are some rough consequences…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

That’s something I’ve never heard before XD

I was just chatting with the YouTuber guy…he doesn’t know how it ends yet, obviously, but from what he just told me, he’s gonna love it.

Yes, I somehow found myself with a group of people who I think represents a huge variety.

I’m not deserving of the alpha-reader title. 😅

I’m still crown…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Nice. How long do you think it’ll take to get their feedback and work through it? (Your guess, of course 🙂)

I’m assuming by February. Which could either be a good guess or will have senior authors shaking their heads. The way I figure is that they probably won’t go through it fast at first due to Christmas and New Year’s, and school s…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I’m gonna wait for Keilah to rp, since Idk what to do with Gabriel at the moment, so this is kinda a good time.

Oh wow! Are these beta readers for Baron Chronicles? I didn’t know you were that far along in the editing process.

Yes. I have two confirmed beta readers at the moment, plus a friend who I’m going to ask, and someone who I…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @keilah-h

Sorry, I was literally preparing an NDA yesterday (for my beta readers) and then went off to do some other stuff.

Gabriel Mai

Gabriel eventually stopped by a short tree. that grew up part of the labyrinth wall. Despite the narrow trunk, which looked like strands of wood twisted together like a candy, the tree had thick…[Read more]

Yay! okay, y’all. Expect to see another instalment by the end of the week.

welp, let’s see it this one goes through…

@grcr

I’ll just casually pretend that I didn’t read that. 

Pure genius! 😉

I probably should go through and add things to differentiate/clarify. I most likely will, idk.

The first two chapters of this book are really difficult, but I promise things become a bit easier later.

Got it! And I get the struggle. You don’t want to info dump or…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @loopylin @ducktator
Oof… Celerant just put Viktor in an awkward place. His deep sense of justice won’t like that. XD

Viktor

He was going to have a headache. Not from a strike or anything, but from this whole unruly ordeal.

“Great job!” He passed a ball to a lanky kid with the aim of a sniper. The kid nodded and pegged another…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

XD

Gabriel Mai

“That depends. Right now? No. You don’t have the strength nor the experience. In the future possibly, though I will say, there is yet to be a woman monster hunter where I am from. But if a woman had the will, and the strength to back it up, I guess it could be okay, though women should be protected like children…[Read more]

@keilah-h

lololol. I get that. The Tangled one was me with the Zero Hour: Freedom set.

Emrys set Blaine down and tilted Bennett’s face upward, “Of course I’m coming home today! I have a couple days off and ten little beans waiting to party with me.”

Bennett’s face lit up, “Are we gonna watch a movie?”

Awwwww

Mam…” Blaine stared adoringly. Without hesitation, he knew what he must draw. First a circle, because all good things start…

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@whalekeeper

He’d hate her attitude XD, but yes

Gabriel Mai

When the screaming quieted, Gabriel answered. “Pretty much, though I don’t know what a Chee-wa-wa is. Ditching them? I can’t. At the moment, the village I live in has had an increased number of attacks despite the population not growing by a large amount, and a few new varieties of…[Read more]