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@godlyfantasy12

AHH! Godly is here!

*Hugs*

What do we have here? A November scene?!

*Excited reading*

*Meets this Callan and his cuckoos.*

Who is this creep?

*plots to cause him destruction*

*finishes reading*

Aw, November, it’s not your fault, dearie.

Great section! Grammatically, the writing is rough, but the scenes flows well. Vivid…[Read more]

I need to work on consistency, which I get is mostly self-discipline (and which is something I’ve always had to work on, writing life aside). I want to write, but I don’t have to write, and there are many things in my life right now that I have to do. Setting aside a specific time to do what I want, even when I’m tired, has been hard. But I’m tr…[Read more]

Callan’s….oof. I so want to strangle that creep

@godlyfantasy12

*Slowly freaks out*

November scenes!!! She’s writing again!! November! Ara! Ahhhhhhhhhhh-

*Freaking out escalates tenfold*

But ya callan sucks

And if she was there (she does later have a confrontation with her, Callan and November) she isn’t at that place in her character to fight back );

@loopylin sadly no XD

@loopylin awww thx!! I feel like my writing is subpar tbh….but idk sometimes posting it elsewhere helps? idk…I give myself such a hard time. I’m just writing it down, and I have to remind myself that every single second XD

@whalekeeper for me I feel like my writing isn’t like…good enough? Like it’s too childish? or…idk…not (mature isn’t the right word…) like I don’t like doing descriptions…so def description writing, but I just feel like its not great. I feel like I wrote better in the past and that thought process stinks so I try not to dwell on it…

ANYWAYYY if u want to read the scenes I’ve got…it’s November scenes… (good luck gang…don’t hate me XD)

here’s the first one! (btw I’m not looking for critiques. this is a draft and idk how the writing is honestly…im not super happy but im just getting words down.)

And its not super linear cuz Im not doing Ara’s…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Ha!

That’s kind of funny, but Julian would KILL anyone who did that to him.

Plus it seems a little cliched.

BUT, it was funny. XD

@linus-smallprint

Got it.

@linus-smallprint

Okay, I’ll fix that. He was supposed to be joking. If he was joking would it work?

Sorry. Sometimes, I shy away from commitment and speak with uncertainty (that’s one of the ways my character, Eric, is like me). Maybe waiting until they are published would be a good idea, but yes, I will let you use them as a r…

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@linus-smallprint

I thought he might want to turn back and no longer continue with them at this point, seeing this as a sign to return to his village and be with Liesle (if I spelled that right). But he seems determined to keep going for the moment.

Yeah, Roland’s pretty stubborn.

Julian is sounding a bit like a mother here. (I’m not sure i…

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@linus-smallprint

I thought so.

A lot happened in that last section that I was hoping on feedback for, so it was surprising when you didn’t say anything. XD

@liberty

Would you be okay with me moving on? I don’t need you to give instant feedback if you’re unable to keep up.

If you really need me to wait a day though then I can.

@linus-smallprint

Hmm, okay. Well that’s odd.

Okay, so you have reached the point where Roland is injured.

No thoughts on the assassination attempt?

idk what I ended up saying.

Okay…. let me go look.

Thanks for the feedback! I’m glad the characters are becoming more alive! Hybridlore would disagree with you on not having all of…[Read more]

Esther, I also think it’s so cool how you write about small everyday struggles. It’s hard to find beauty in the mundane, when it seems the same day after day.

But in your writing, you can make even the everyday struggles, the repeating tasks beautiful, and everything you write has a message, and I think it’s so cool!!!! And I know God will use you <33

@esther-c

Awww! Esther!!! That means literally so so SO much to me!!

I appreciate you so much, you’re amazing 🥺🥺💜💜💜💜

I never really thought about it that way!! But that makes a lot of sense!!

Honestly I’ve struggled a lot with the way that I just go to the hard things that need to be talked about…people like my parents have said that my…[Read more]