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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@freed_and_redeemed    @hybridlore    @koshka    @keilah-h     @elishavet-pidyon     @linus-smallprint
NEXT SECTION!!!
It was late into the evening before the meeting finally broke up. Julian’s words had shaken the little church, and they were ready and open to hear more. As Leon and Julian took turns speaking to them and en…
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
The Protector-Gabriel
Gabriel sighed. “People don’t follow princes who make fun of them. Also, I advise you be careful what you say under your breath. I have sharp ears.”
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@keilah-h   @linus-smallprint   @hybridlore
Okay, here’s a question for y’all.
So, I personally really like Julian’s speech/sermon, whatever it is. (I cringe when y’all say sermon because I’m a woman and I wrote it. But I guess Julian is a guy. 🤣) Anyhow, I really like some of the themes it hits, I like the flow. Basically, I perso…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Well, first off, this is Julian we’re talking about. Leon had more understanding for them. Second, this is really their first time going through something like this. The last time was in Ardenta, and Ardentans have a certain brute stubbornness and willingness to just hang on that a lot of other cultures don’t. (That’s part of why…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I don’t know who fell apart worse, them or the church in Clonabay.
Julian’s sermon is fine, but I think he needs to remind them more of what they are fighting for. What the reward in heavan will be.
mkay, that works. I’ll try to pull some of that in.
Have these three actually been participating in idol worship, or is J…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Hmm, the problem is, I’m trying not to drag things like “greek” and “hebrew” in because that muddies the world a bit because it is technically an alternate reality.
Well, it’s a bit of a chopped up version (due to space. Who made the rule of 100 characters anyways?!) But it’s a Chesterton quote that reads,
“The great march of…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
The Protector-Gabriel
“I’m called the Protector.” His voice remained the same, and he made no movement to bow or show any recognition to Leander’s princely status.
I know, it’s short, but Gabriel doesn’t talk too much unless he’s in a banter mood, which does occasionally happen.
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
The Protector-Gabriel
“If we stick as a group, it will be easier to keep others from falling to harm, but it also means we will cover less ground and it will be therefore longer before we can find enough of those purple balls to send everyone home.” The Protector ignored Leander’s last question. “Sticking as a group will keep…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
I was watching a YouTube video, checked my notifs quick and there it was
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
The Protector-Gabriel
The Protector looked at the vines, then at the strange cat-like person in front of him. “I don’t mind at all.” He spoke with an even tone, as if every word was measured. “But please be less reckless.” Even though he issued a request, his voice remained the same, showing no emotion. His voice was as blank…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
OOOOHHHHHH! Let the fun begin *evil villain laugh*
One sec, I’ll write and rp right now…
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@anyone
The Protector-Gabriel
The Protector watched the events unfold in silence, sitting comfortably on a rock. Through the rune over his left eye, for a split second, he could see his little cottage home where the Fourth Protector waited through the purple ball. Once the boy went through, he saw his home no more.
The Protector sighed. This…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Are you saying I did a good job at describing him?!?!?! YAY!!!!
Yes, you did a good job. Gold star: ⭐
But that’s not to say the that his actions are safe….
Lol. Yet another thing that will make him and Gabriel clash. Gabriel also will plan out his moves, but he’s very careful. In his line of hobby, work, duty, wha…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Just for these reasons:
Exactly. I kinda saw some of those points coming when I read Leander’s description.
In Character Party, we had literal fights between characters. We resolved things a little, and no one died, but my poor Nahim had a concussion, and the other characters…oh Zaren ( @highscribeofaetherium )and Nahim had a…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Thanks.Yeah, they’re like right at the center of everything, so it’s not easy.
Ah, yes. It was a run-on sentence into the next paragraph, and I tried to clean it up with punctuation and forgot to change some words.
The definitions are the literal Greek translations for that word. There are two words in Greek that make up…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@freed_and_redeemed    @hybridlore    @koshka    @keilah-h     @elishavet-pidyon     @linus-smallprint
NEXT SECTION!!!
The next morning after breakfast, Julian and Leon began making their way along the streets looking for the homes of the three men they had left to lead the church: Konner Krüger, Reinhold Meier, and Fox Keller.…
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Oh dear, Leander, Hunter, and Gabriel may clash…
this rp may be filled with that sweet drama like in Character Party *evilly taps fingertips together*
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Ruth replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 2 months ago
lol
Anyone can be good at art if they practice.
Glad you like his character. He doesn’t have a written story yet, and I wasn’t planning on giving him one, but maybe I should change that decision.
Also, your forum signature is really funny.
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Ruth replied to the topic Labyrinth rp in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Ooooooooooh! Interest officially peaked. (Barnes always peaks my interest, but now more than ever, which is saying something.) Gabriel will most certainly pry into that one…
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