Louise Fowler

@dragon-snapper

Hooks are not my forte (I struggle writing a good opening line) My usual go-to is possibly a line of dialogue, so you’re jumping in right in the middle of a conversation (and you’d use some backstory to find out how we got here)
Or describing a scene (an example from my own writing, “Two weary travellers stood on the dusty…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper

Hooks are not my forte (I struggle writing a good opening line) My usual go-to is possibly a line of dialogue, so you’re jumping in right in the middle of a conversation (and you’d use some backstory to find out how we got here)
Or describing a scene (an example from my own writing, “Two weary travellers stood on the dusty…[Read more]

@daeus

In a twist of fate, he is forced to confront everything he fights for shattered, everything he cherishes put to the test, and a long-hidden truth that will threaten his life.

This sentence is feeling very clumsy (I can’t tell if it is clumsy, or I’m just not reading it right)
But like @dragon-snapper said. Perhaps “…he is forced to…[Read more]

@daeus

In a twist of fate, he is forced to confront everything he fights for shattered, everything he cherishes put to the test, and a long-hidden truth that will threaten his life.

This sentence is feeling very clumsy (I can’t tell if it is clumsy, or I’m just not reading it right)
But like @dragon-snapper said. Perhaps “…he is forced to…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper

I also quite liked (and still do, somewhat) the battle droids, they’re so strange looking. 😀 I think I appreciate little-boy Anakin, because he was a child in a movie full of grown-ups, and I always appreciated and liked the child characters as a child myself (but what child doesn’t? Especially if said child character is a Chosen…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper @daeus

One last thing, you say he ‘takes on’ the character. Well, at a glance, I might thing that he’s trying to fight this character.

Yeah, this confused me, too. Is he fighting this guy, or is he becoming this guy? (that was my first thought) And also, saying what “he fights for is shattered” can’t really give us any meani…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy

Yes, I should think so. 😀 Such a shame, all the stuff cool is happening in the States. 😛 We don’t even have a Disneyland here (yet…?) 😛

@daeus

It’s really good, I think I’m interested. I think I agree with @kate-flournoy about the slight choppiness of the whole thing. Perhaps a little more backstory? (I am not an expert on how synopses work, so I don’t know how much one should put in and how much one should leave out)

“…but strange events keep thwarting his every move. In a…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy I live in, *ahem* Western Australia XD 😀

@kate-flournoy Bummer! I don’t believe I can fit in a quick trip to Indiana for a conference in my plans next year. 😉 XD

@dragon-snapper That’s just sad, because Anakin Skywalker was, um, the protagonist! XD I haven’t seen the prequels (except for Episode I, when I was very young, and I admit, Jar Jar Binks was my favourite character, but we’re talking about a seven-year-old-ish aged girl who loved funny stuff and didn’t appreciate the story), but the pics of Ani I…[Read more]

This is amazing advice, Kate, thanks so much for sharing! 🙂 I’ve seen the tip about selling yourself, not your product before. Seeing it in a two different, unrelated places makes it all the more good advice, I reckon, because it’s not just one person telling you what they think works.

Of course, these conferences are in the States, am I right? 😉

@kate-flournoy I think had heard it was set between Episode III and Episode IV. We watched an honest trailer (or some sort of trailer analysis, I can’t remember) the guy kept saying “#RogueOneisaPrequel” as if implying it’s going to be terrible, because the original prequels were.

@kate-flournoy Ah, okay, I see now. This has been very enlightening! 😀

@emma-flournoy Wait, so Rogue One isn’t going to be part of its own trilogy? I thought I had head that was going to be the case… I hope not! 😀

@daeus @kate-flournoy Okay, so if you’re turbulent, you act like your personality type, but you also sometimes act like others? XD That’s interesting.

@emma-flournoy Oh, good, so I’m not weird for not looking forward to it. I feel like, it’s not the original characters (I think Darth Vader may be in it, but I dunno *shrug*), so I don’t really care about it as much. I may be totally wrong when it comes out (my brother and I think my dad both want to see it), but I’d rather get on with this new…[Read more]

@his-instrument Excuse my ignorance 😉 But what is the difference between assertive and turbulent? 🙂

@bluejay I love it! 😀 And it’s a ginger meowing his head off! You have no idea how perfect that is! 😀 :3 <3

@hannah-c What time is it for you? 😀