OrangeArmadillo

@thearcaneaxiom

I agree with Min and Jonas on everything they said. Resolve of the character will balance the unresolved political structure.However there’s still a lot of things you could do to end it differently. For one thing, most dystopias almost never talk about what happens after they take down the government. They need to reestablish e…

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@grcr

Thank you!

Also, @savannah_grace2009 I was gonna ask, how does she know that Lilitu dreamed exactly what happened to her before he even describes what happens?

@savannah_grace2009

I didn’t really notice it seeming clunky! I like the part where she’s thinking back to playing pretend with her friends, it’s so sweet.

Personally, for the flashback part, I think I would leave it out and give more of like a summary, sort of like:

She knew that this was no ordinary dream. And not just because of his reaction.…

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@freedomwriter76

Nice!

@savannah_grace2009

Yep! Here’s one I made for my WIP a while ago! Hopefully this doesn’t post twice, lol.

@jonas

Sort of, lol. It’s usually hard for me to think of things my characters hate, unless it’s like really obvious lol.

@jonas

Right, so like the first impression they give others. That would be interesting. I think I’d prefer just to write a paragraph from the point of view of someone else, and see how the main character looks from their eyes.

Okay, yeah. That could definitely come in handy for some characters. For me, it’s kind of hard to think of things like…[Read more]

@rae

Wait is that from a prequel/sequel? Nice!

@mineralizedwritings

Oh and as long as the rest  of your book is unique it’s alright to have a stereotypical ending. It’s when your book has a love triangle, America as a setting, and rebels taking down the government. If you can add one factor to really mix it up and make it something totally new, it won’t be considered stereotypical (Is it set…

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@mineralizedwritings

Something I have heard about in my research about plots is that there’s two separate goals your character has to reach. One of them is said and known about, such as defeating the government, the other is never mentioned but obvious to the reader. Something the character really longs for, a personal goal that is just as i…

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@jonas

I like them! Flamebreaker, Midnight, and Lightshard are my favorites, I think. And the blurb looks good!

@grcr

They look really good!

@jonas

Yeah, I’ve seen questions like that on personality questionnaires like this before. So something like “Makes others feel: intimidated” or sort of like that?

@loopylin

I love the vibes! 🥰😍 Pretty… you should do more. Post more. Seriously.

Oh, when did that happen? Purely out of curiosity.

@loopylin @esther-c @euodia-vision @smiley

I also want to!!

Altho I also want to wait a little longer for @godlyfantasy12 – she was really excited for it and planned out the whole thing… ❤️

Maybe before the dance, we shop for outfits? There are so many shops nearby! The whole school could cancel classes today for it!

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@savannah_grace2009

Ooohh nice cliffhanger! XD

@mineralizedwritings

I love it!!

@rae

Of course! You’re welcome anywhere! I usually just pop in and reply to things XD