OrangeArmadillo

@rae

Oki, I read it!

Overall, I think it’s well-paced and has a great amount of description. I could understand the basic setting and tech even though it isn’t my own world or story. The ship’s name, The Nightmare, automatically makes me want to root for it XD

I especially liked Mandin’s appearance! You used body language, but almost more im…[Read more]

I’m BACK BABY!!!

*aHem*

Just glad the posts are working again!

@kathleenramm

*Takes a deep gasp after rising from the dark chasm of silence*

Thank you!! I appreciate your dedication with tech, which I do not have 🙂 Hopefully your magical powers will bring us great prosperity in the future.

…Hopefully this post comes through??

@loopylin @rae

Let’s try this again for the millionth time y’all

Sebzter

Seb stood in between Eddie and Dante, and put his hands on his hips. “I said mingle, not strangle. What’s the beef?”

HELP

Wyoh’s messing with me big time… (this is a test)

@rae

Helloooo, I’m heeeeere

1. Feels like average length to me! Then again it isn’t in book format on KP, and is one continuous page, so I may be gauging it incorrectly. I think if it’s 2-3 pages long on your document, that feels adequate.

2. If it’s the end of a chapter, it works as a summary. If not, I don’t think it’s too abrupt to have in…[Read more]

@rae

Maybe they have to find a special macguffin in the middle of this fairy tale land, that will effectively send them back home? Like Oz? And creatures keep attacking them to protect the special artifact? Just spitting ideas here lol.

@loopylin @rae

There are at least five good teachers tho! There’s Mr. Gregory ofc. Then there’s the art teacher with the red and yellow scarf, Miss Soleil, and the two dance instructors with a romance subplot.

…Granted, I created all of these characters XD But nice adults are underrated in fiction and deserve screentime.
Sebzter
The twins and…[Read more]

…So I was wondering – should we have a main goal for the characters to head towards? I haven’t been part of a KP roleplay that has that, but this feels like one of those.

@loopylin

Whatever you choose, I am here to emotionally support your life decisions 🥹🥹

@loopylin @rae

I think this school needs help. Like a student council or somethin.

Sebzter

Chase, the detention boy, appeared once more. He was out of breath and quite out of his mind.

As the teacher came towards them, with less enthusiasm than exhaustion, Seb noted the slight vibration coming from their barricade. It would fall down…[Read more]

Trying to tag again @kathleenramm

I think that’s her tag, might be wrong 😆

@loopylin

Ooh, I’d join if you did

@rae

I made her up but she’s an NPC, so go ahead. She might be hard to find in the dark though XD

@loopylin

*runs up, out of breath* I’m baaack

Sebzter

“Come now!” Seb puffed quietly. “It isn’t that bad… is it?”

“If you call a huge bruise normal.”

The boy patted his own face a few times, trying to gauge how big it was, and what his definition of bad was. It felt like a candied apple had grown over his left eye.

“I hit myself with a hairb…[Read more]

@rae @keilah-h @whoever

Winston

The demon boy took some time to absorb the sight. The sun warmed up his scales, and he periodically closed his eyes to soak it in. When he could enjoy it no more, he walked west, towards where the evening would be the brightest.

Every time he came to a hilltop, he ran his hands over the sheep, as if running…[Read more]

Y’all, I’m also sad that the pictures aren’t working, because I have memes and comics and fanart, but none of it will come through. My passion is temporarily deflated.

@freed_and_redeemed

Oof idk, I feel as if I don’t know enough about your story to give ideas 😅 Maybe give him scenes where he’s missing meaningful moments with his family because he’s looking back instead of forward (you know, reliving his grief)? He could miss a child’s special event, or forget a promise he made one of them.