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@warrenluther04 I’m just going to post your cover here, cause I finished it a while back. Yay.
(I hope you didn’t want color cause I didn’t…. I left space for words. I could add them or you could.
@dragon-snapper Those are melted chairs behind you.
@dekreel sitting… thinking about some book probably.
@sam-kowal Stan has probably grown a lot…[Read more]

@sam-kowal You actually counted the number of turtles in Daeus’ signature? Impressive! 😀

And @mnvalentine , I’m sorry I’m getting back so late: I was on hiatus. 😐

@mnvalentine I cannot read it as of right now because I have to go, but I just wanted to tell you that I’ll beta-read the first chapter for you and get back to you on this. 🙂 If I’m writing tomorrow, which I hope to be, I’ll read it. 😀 But I liked the newspaper magazine article you included!

Ooo, interesting topic, @dekreel.
I want to expand a bit on something @notawriter said – often bullying comes from family life. I know this firsthand; I know many small children who are bullies in some way. They usually act differently around adults, or at church, if they go. But family problems is a huge thing, especially if it is the father (and…[Read more]

@mnvalentine

Hmm… yes maybe that will work. I was planning on having a more sweeping epic but maybe a tighter story might suit the premise better. Thanks!

@introvert_girl

Sure no problem.

@mnvalentine

I agree with what everyone else has said. I think the problem has to do with the pacing and the passiveness of the main character. There is a lot of description that slow the story down and much of the information conveyed through dialogue could have easily been summed up in a few lines.

Just some thoughts…

#1: The article in the…[Read more]

@mnvalentine I think it is somewhat boring, in a way. Of course, there’s the question, ‘What’s going to happen next?’ which is partially engaging and makes me want to read more. But, the characters and the conflict didn’t drag me in for the first chapter. August has some conflict because he’s not as popular as Trent, but he didn’t seem to want…[Read more]

@mnvalentine Thank you for sharing!  I do agree with Elizabeth and Skredder.  It is a little to dull and slow moving, even though its great for establishing some facts.  I like how you described the characters.  Now I am curious to read more. 🙂  I have terrible times with my first chapters too.  So exiting you are so close to publishing!

@mnvalentine Shorter would probably help. I don’t think you necessarily need more conflict as much as you should capitalize on the conflict you’ve got. Humor would also help move the story on a bit faster. 🙂

@mnvalentine Thank you for letting us read this. I have to say that I am pretty curious as to what happens after this chapter. But, it does seem a bit stagnant. It didn’t feel like anything was really moving. Even the part where they had to rush to move everything in a week didn’t feel hurried. The characters themselves didn’t seem to move much.…[Read more]

I just made a serious mistake: Not everyone wants to, or is able to, submit their entries on the doc! So I will allow you to submit it here. In fact, I think it’s best if you submit it here.

Submit this information:

Name:
Species: (Can be human. Or anything else…)
Appearance:
Personality:
Other notes and/or facts:

And if you are already on…[Read more]

@warrenluther04  Where… is it?

Hang on — I got your back! 😉

ATTENTION: THIS IS WARREN’S NEXT PART.

A Dog in the Kingdom of Pen
Part 4: The Raspberry King

Warren, Catwing, and Riddlewit turned to see a tall girl with long, caramel hair and stormy grey eyes. She was wearing an olive jacket, jeans, and combat boots and was striding towards…[Read more]

@supermonkey42   I guess that was also back when you had the idea for the Compendium. XD

Well! Apparently so…

Yeah, that’s the problem with wanting to include lots of people…

@mnvalentine  You think so?? 😀

@gh24682468999  @ariel-ashira  Thank you!!! Aethasia is a land from The Aetherlight, which is like an online, steampunk, alle…[Read more]

PS, thank you to everyone who commented!

@Skredder

@Snapper

@Ben P

@MNValentine

@mnvalentine What’s interesting is: @dekreel said she wasn’t good at humor. It appears she didn’t know her true potential. 😀

This was way back when the idea for a KPA was first hatched.

@mnvalentine Ooh I didn’t even think about making a map.. That sounds hard though!
Hmm Maybe my plot elements would become clearer if my characters motivations were more defined.

Another favorite part. With good reason. 😉

The GIF-Hiders: An Easter Story

Part Eleven: Daybreak, Mayhem, and Rocks

“This wasn’t supposed to be my problem.”

“Aww, cheer up, Xonos! It’s an experience!”

“Yeah, it’s—AUGH! Oomph! ARIELLA!!”

“That wasn’t me, it was Iliara!”

“Sorryy, Aisyyy…”

Jenna cocked her head and smirked at N.C.’s…[Read more]

@ariel-ashira Thanks! It will hopefully get better as time goes on…. 🙂

@skredder Thanks!

@catwing Okay. If you want a full-body picture of my dog, though, I can give it to you….

AAH! I DON’T WANNA BE NOBODY!!!! *howls* *shivers* 🙁 🙁 🙁 ;( ( 😉 ) *winks* It’s fine. 🙂

Yeah, I know. Oh. I must have made it seem like Riddlewit actually…[Read more]