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@savannah_grace2009

Yeah, that would work!! 😄

Ok, I read them both. The first one does pull me in better and I want to read more, but I just love the description and feel of the second, however, it may be a bit slow for the beginning chapter. That’s all I have for now, I will go over it more later today if I have time!

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@savannah_grace2009

Hmmm…

Alright, my basic answer: the first one draws me in more and I like its prologue. I do like the first two or three chapters of the second one, though.

I don’t know if you only wanted advice on the first/begining chapter… if so, you don’t have to listen to me or read my next few thoughts…. but if you don’t m…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@savannah_grace2009

This is supposed to say “feel free to tag me in any post”…so yeah…XD

Dont worry, I understood XD I make errors like that all the time 😂

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement is so sweet 🥰

@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@savannah_grace2009

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel. I will defiantly look through your link and give my critique 🙂 And pretty soon I will be posting some of mine to get feedback, I’ll be sure to tag you 🙂

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

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@trailblazer

I really like this scene!!!

Some ideas for plot twists:

Maybe she apologizes to Albert or something?? And then realizes that she does like him? Or something happens with her and Chester? OR A NEW BOY MOVES TO TOWN!!

Sorry, all my ideas seem to be centered around romance….lol

@esther-c

Livia

She stood there for a moment. “Um…I’m not sure how to do this.”

“Yeah, me neither,” Lukas laughed a little, “I was kind of hoping you would know.”

“Well, I don’t.”

“Oh.”

“We should watch the other people, and maybe we’ll figure it out?” Liv raised an eyebrow, and Lukas nodded.

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@esther-c

Hey, my little sister’s name is Hallie!! XD

@freedomwriter76 @jonas @rae

Sef

She flinched back at the man’s voice.

It reminded her of too much….

No. She would not think about Iver now….

Cowering back into the shadows, she hoped he wouldn’t notice her. Or ask her any questions.

@mineralizedwritings @esther-c

Thanks guys, it really helps me to know that I can talk to you guys <333

@trailblazer

Sorry, I keep misspelling it….XD

@rae

If you want, I could add Sef if calyhuge’s character doesn’t fit him. Sef knows pain, she’s been abused and would probably relate to him. she too has skeletons in the closet that she doesn’t like to talk about…so yeah….