Mariposa Aristeo

@ariel-ashira YES! ANOTHER ENFJ!! I love being an ENFJ. 😛

@daeus It was clearly because of your nose. XD 😛

@Jenwriter17 All the best for writing and editing, friend! <3

I’m afraid I don’t have the time to beta read at the moment, but I hope you can find a heap of other people to help you. 🙂

@warrenluther04 I am lovin’ all the kapeefer literature you and Dekreel are writing! 😀 Great job! 😉

@seekjustice Yay, chapter swapping! Sounds great, thank you! 😀

Yes, that makes sense. I think I’m going to rewrite the first chapter, keeping everyone’s notes in mind. Jane said I was telling instead of showing a lot, so I’m going to try to work on that (maybe I should finish Daeus’ Show Don’t Tell course, hehe 🙂 ). So I’ll definitely let you…[Read more]

@dekreel this is totally awesome-sauce! I can’t wait until the next paaaaaaart! 😀

@warrenluther04 @jane-maree @rochellaine @skredder @seekjustice @anyone I forgot

Thank you all so very much for reading the first chapter of my WIP! I admit, I was really nervous about other people reading it, but you all were so honest and I will keep all of your advice in mind.

Considering how much I needed to work on with my first chapter, I…[Read more]

@warrenluther04 yeah, I’d love it if you would! 🙂 warning though; this is a really rough first draft

@Dekreel awwww I recognised that direct quote. *blushes*

This was the best, Dekreel. xD

@jane-maree probably general overall chapter, but also stuff like inconsistencies (which some readers have already pointed out), and yes showing/telling stuff. Thank you!!!

@jane-maree you’re welcome, ’twas my pleasure 😉

@Jenwriter17 okay so I don’t want to go into full editor mode and scare you (been there, done that, it was bad xD) so what exactly are you looking for critique on? The general overall chapter? Or some more details like showing vs telling, etc.?

@Jenwriter17 thank you so so much for organising this and it was a heap of fun to do it. *throws confetti* Thanks again. 😀

@seekjustice okay, i think i let you have access. lemme know if it didn’t work.

@rochellaine just looked at it! hilarious! *looks at outlining notes to make sure something like that doesn’t happen* 😉 😀

@rochellaine haha, okay sounds good 😀

@rochellaine ah, no I didn’t see that! was it recent? then i might be able to find it…..

@rochellaine I’m gonna have to go now. I hope you get lots of writing done! 😉 I might be on again Monday, but if not, probably Thursday, Friday and the weekend.

@rochellaine Thank you so much for reading my first chapter! I’ve never had anyone read my first drafts before. like, ever. thanks so much for your honesty and help! <3 😀

@rochellaine that would be great, yes.

@rochellaine okay, awesome! 🙂