Loopy

@ellette-giselle

Ty! Just the effect I was going for. Creepy, but not scary creepy. More of just otherworldly.

@whalekeeper

Thank you!! Glad you like it! : D

Ok I actually just finished it today!

@raxforge ohhhhh

makes SO much sense now

@loopylin @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @linus-smallprint @ellette-giselle @godlyfantasy12 @rae @raxforge @whoever

I have a fun question! I’ve already figured out my answer for my story, but I asked my friends this question and got so much traction that I wanted to post it here too. I love hearing what different people come up with. My f…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @liberty @hybridlore

Here’s your 700 (actually a little over) for the 14 snowballs y’all threw at me.

ridiculous amount of snowballs

Y’all gotta chill XD

Mostly you, Ellette😤

😆

Riker nudged the front door open, walking into the small foyer. He stepped aside to give Leon room to get inside and glanced around the…

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@linus-smallprint

lol. Poor Joseph. It must have been awful for him.

ah yes. Eric is very proud of himself.
good. Good! I’m so glad this scene works well! “touch down Tulip!!” (Storks if you haven’t scene the movie that quite come from)
 

I’m surprised there was no comment on the Julian/Joseph conversation.
was it good? Does it fit?

@linus-smallprint

that’s what (frustratingly) keeps me from being able to say this scene doesn’t work.

I don’t like you at all.

yes! Yes it does make sense, and I hate that I’m saying it, but it fits.

I doubly don’t like you.

I also agree that the interactions seem very stiff or formal, but I wasn’t sure if that’s what you’re going for.

@linus-smallprint ok!!

Let’s get to it!

-I see the king is trying to convince Oliver and Tyn to talk Alan into magic again. Yikes. I hope they don’t go through with it. I also read when Alan is going to try to use the magic himself, which won’t be good.

Why does the crow seem to be sentient? Why does it want him to use the magic? Is this…[Read more]

@koshka

Rory

“How’re you holding up”

Rory glanced over at Leo. “I’m okay.”

Leo nodded and continued on.
Rory glanced back at the school. He felt a crawling sensation along his spine. As if… as if someone was watching them.
Rory evened his pace so it would match Leo’s steps. He came alongside the older boy. “I think someone’s followi…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint I’m still reading! I just haven’t had the chance to critique the chapters.

@raxforge friggin’ cheese?

never heard of that.

but I love cheese so…….

@freed_and_redeemed

Awww 😢😢

@mineralizedwritings

Aaaaahhh he looks so ethereal, I love it!! It does look translucent, you really caught the effect! And it’s so different from your other projects because it’s a lot more flowy and glowy.

You good, Kefa?

@jonas @ellette-giselle

It might help to get the first part of Group 1 (wounded, non-fighters, etc) to the river so we aren’t scrabbling to get everyone there after this side mission.

@hybridlore

Thank you!

Cute scene between Joseph and Julian? Hmm, not exactly the word I would have gone for…… lol. I think I get what you mean tho.

Ah. I use the name Jesus a lot in my writing. It’s a name with power.

@ellette-giselle

Aw, cute scene between Joseph and Julian! I noticed a few typos, but that’s not a big deal. Only other thing is, I noticed that in Sabina’s letter someone said that the orphans need Jesus. I don’t know why, I can’t remember too many references to Him, so that stood out to me since many fantasy books use a different name for Jes…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

You’re not kicked. You just haven’t RPd so most people guessed you dropped out.

Plus, the boat crew, (which I think you’re characters are with) has done nothing for quiet some time because we’re trying to connect the other groups to them in order to have a little conference and figure out what on earth is…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

Okay, I made the suggested changes to the last couple of sections, and I’m working on some more Joseph/Amelia interactions. I thought I’d just go ahead and post the next scene while I take care of the other stuff.

NEXT SECTION

After Leon and Julian left…

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@koshka

Quincy was flopped on his back wriggling under a bush. Leo extracted him, taking a moment to brush him off before slinging him over his shoulder.

Best mental picture ever! XD

Rory

Rory looked up at Leo. “Go where? where can we go?” Panic was rising in his chest, but he swallowed it down. He took Leo’s hand and let the young man…[Read more]