Loopy

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Older Joseph

@linus-smallprint

Saw a movie with this in recently and it was painful.

Don’t get me started.

I have some of the boards done. Not all of them tho.

@linus-smallprint

sounds good. Again, it’s your book. But, for me the spell images being described or not would be the difference between me putting down the series at this book or continuing if I had bought the book or checked it out in their library.

CP == Christian Perspective?

haha! That’s a good one to watch movies with always. No, Cle…[Read more]

@liberty

No, it’s totally fine. I was just being dramatic.

I’m glad you enjoy the sections.

@linus-smallprint What I meant by “breaks immersion” is that I didn’t really want to pay attention to the spells. They have no use to me. They’re deeply evil in Alan’s world and useless in mine, so what reason do I have for needing them in my memory?

Also the part about the writer changing them didn’t make sense to me. Why not just not write…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ahhhh, gotcha.

Sure!

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Anybody want to see some Character Aesthetics?!?!?

@linus-smallprint

SEVENTH TIME IT DELETED MY POST. GRRRR

You can’t separate spell casting from demonic power. The Bible makes that clear. So, if wyou want the spell casting, your going to have to keep the other part in mind.

Okay, I got through about twenty seconds of the first song.

FF!!!! I love Final Fantasy soundtrack! XV is my…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

So, whenever I’m overwhelmed, whether by emotions or circumstances, or just whatever, I have to remind myself that God is there and He cares and wants me to turn to Him for help. I understand it’s not easy for everyone to talk to a God that they can’t physically see or hear, but He’s there, Kefa. He wants you to come to Him wit…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

beast.

Fine. I’ll write. I feel like I am everyone’s target. *sigh*

@liberty    (because I’m nice and you like my story. lol)

Josef looked down. “It’s complicated. I didn’t choose this. I’m just… trying to survive like everyone else.

Franz shook his head bitterly. “Survive? By enforcing fear?”

Josef dropped his voic…

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@linus-smallprint

Hmm. well, first of all the fact that the church has stopped being attacked. Then a reference Sabina made in her letter about the soldiers being super tense. Then Joseph notices the same thing.

Hmm. I wounder how true this will turn out to be.

Haha,

Poor Joseph. I completely understand his reaction to this.

I know poor…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Aww!! 🥰

So, one question—why would Amelia inherit part of her uncle’s inn? Wouldn’t that usually go to her brothers?

Also, I like that we’re getting more conversations between Joseph and Amelia. However, I feel like they’re all based on future situations—mostly just “what if this happens?” Except for this one:
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@rae

Ah! That makes sense!!

lol.

Hey.

Just wanted to pop in to let you know I’m still praying for you Kefa.

May God be with you.

now I need to writer something for Nahim…

@ellette-giselle

She was being chased through the meadow by a teen girl. Sorry if that wasn’t clear.

@rae

I like it, but I’m confused about her age. She acts about five. Maybe eight if you want to stretch it. But I thought you said she was a teen. If she is, (why does she have such childish dialogue) and how is she hugging Baron around the legs? is he a giant?

Other then that, I really liked it! It’s a very sweet scene.

@loopylin @ellette-giselle

Baron scene!

Baron watched a little girl run across a meadow, flowers woven into her long silver hair. She was laughing in childish joy as a teen girl chased after her through the meadow grass. As he watched, a breeze welled around him, playing in his hair. He was like her Guardian Angel, her hero, who watched from afar…

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I’m kinda in between Whaley and Ellette on this. They both have good points I agree with.

It’s your call, Linus. Your story is the one on the line.

@whalekeeper I get that and to some extent agree. It’s just the inclusion of a detailed description of the spells kinda broke immersion for me a little. It didn’t seem THAT necessary.