Linus Smallprint

@linus-smallprint

There is one who Aaron kind of reminds me of who is a year younger than me, being 20 years old

Wait, you’re twenty? Or did I just completely misunderstand that.

Unless I missed something, this side of his personality has kind of disappeared since he met Turin.

I certainly will keep that in mind. I feel like none of the situations…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint

Ok, here’s the next part….. and then things get bad. lol.

Morning dawned, and after breakfast and a time of prayer, the men and boys went off to train with the soldiers.

Turin was a born fighter, and the way of the sword seemed natural and easy to him. Aaron, on the other hand, found sword craft less to…

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@ellette-giselle

Okay…I’m so sorry…I’m not the best at critiqueing 😣😭😭😭😭Actually I’m horrible at it but oh well

OK, in the begining I said that Aaron was 18!! Turin was a year or two older Sabina was 16! Does that fix it???

Well…you should be able to tell a character’s age based on how they act, without the author saying that. Since both…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint

ok crazies…. here is TURIN who is a TEENAGER and DOESN’T have a beard.

@savannah_grace2009 I love all of them! I also like how they’re all basically human but with powers and different colored skin–that’s typically what I end up doing too. And don’t worry, my creature rant will be long also.

@linus-smallprint You asked, I answered! Here’s a description of each creature straight from the fanfic I made them…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint @keilah-h

Here is a list of the races in my book. Note that each race listed appears human except for the color of their skin, hair, eyes, and blood, and their powers of course.

Azer: Azers are pyrokinetics and can create and manipulate fire with their mind. It isn’t just the cliche “can shoot fire from their hands and from…[Read more]

I have a few thoughts.

“Sabina,” called Turin. “Come down, we have to go.”

Sabina deliberately turned away.

“Sabina come,” commanded Turin, firmly.

She did not move.

Turin’s eyes narrowed. “Why you little–– Sabina! You get down here right this instant! Get down or I’ll––”

This scene felt a little off. He went from being minorly annoyed to th…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint

YUCK!!! You sir, do not pay attention to descriptions!!!! A full beard! UGH! No! He’s nineteen or twenty!

Ummm …I seriously thought that he’d have a beard and be in his twenties/thirties!

And I thought Aaron was even older!

I mean, I still consider late twenties/early thirties to be a young man…so you m…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint @theshadow

This part is a little short, but if I get a reply today before noon then I’ll send another.

The sun was high in the sky, shining down on the weary travelers as they trudged along the dusty road. The question ‘how much longer’ had been asked multiple times by every child and they were all hot and…

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@linus-smallprint

Of course.

Yeah, we followed a guide that Sara sent.l did you see it? It’s the same points I have listed.

@linus-smallprint

It is good to see that Aaron is letting others in on his weaknesses instead of trying to bear it all himself. I know his doubts about God being in control have been mentioned earlier, but he somehow seems more human and relatable when he confesses these doubts out loud (even if that is an action that takes humility).

I’m glad!…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed @savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint @theshadow

Ok, I tagged Linus and Shadow cause y’all are reading the book and I thought you might be interested.

Here is my playlist! (All songs that have lyrics are Christian)

             Let There Be Light Book Playlist

1.) Aaron: h ttps://www.…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I love your book, it’s so good! I just don’t have much mental energy to critique other people’s work atm so I’m behind on a lot of things!

I’ll get to it soon though so keep tagging me!!!!!!!!

@linus-smallprint

Pretty much the same thing as Loopy here — busy and not really online too much lately. I will definitely get caught up here, and I love your book! It’s amazing.

@linus-smallprint

Don’t put the commas and the tags’ll work.

Also, I’m so sorry I’m behind. Been so worn out from work, I barely have any energy to read anything, even stuff I really enjoy. I really love your book so far so please keep tagging me! I just might be really behind and slow to respond, sorry.

@savannah_grace2009 I’d love to see a list of all the species and their abilities/descriptions of them, if you have a master list like that.

I feel like your and @linus-smallprint ‘s creatures kinda inspired my own which I’ve been working on recently.

@savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint @theshadow

here’s the next part. It’s a little short.

Aaron gently laid a sleeping child on the grass. He had carried the boy since late afternoon, and now the sun had long since set. People were gathering in little groups on the grass, and a few small fires soon sprang up. Aaron slowly rose and eased his…

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@linus-smallprint

I am laughing right now, mostly because I relate to drawing a character, looking back on it, and realizing how awful it looks. Yup, I’ve been there before.

Oh dear…. it’s horrible!

If it makes you feel better, I was imagining Turin looking even older for whatever reason, perhaps in his forties despite the fact you mentioned h…

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@linus-smallprint

Yeah, I’ve got to work on that :/

Pythonos are anyone who gives themself to the Master, and they become pure evil.

You are right, they kidnap the vulnerable so that they can be easily influenced and converted to Pythonos.

I haven’t actually posted chapter 16, but I will soon!!!!

Sef and her mani are Paynes. Neveah is pure…[Read more]

NOOO KP ATE MY POST UGH

@highscribeofaetherium @jonas @esther-c @whalekeeper @freed_and_redeemed @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @theducktator @theshadow @anyone-else-following-my-novel

I made a playlist of my novel!!!!!!!

I saw this thing on Pinterest and just had to do it XD XD

I also did the songs for each chapter. I didn’t do…[Read more]