Linus Smallprint

@linus-smallprint

Oh why! Must it be a hand or foot? And why talons! Can’t you just restrict the movement! This is horrible. If he and Martha do get married, how is he supposed to hug her without slicing her back?!?!?

Think Linus!!!!

And partly crippling him really does not work, because think of the binds he’ll be in when trying to run or…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yeah, it is a rough life. I feel like a lot of people will read about Leon and Julian and be like, “oh cool, the messenger missionaries on the run from soldiers” and not really think about what that would be like for NINE YEARS.

I chuckled at this.

so did I. lol.

Ew. Yeah, eat the bread instead.

You’ve never licked…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Ooo, that would be a cool idea.

I had the pro version for a little while as well, but I think both work fine.

I like the look of hand-drawn ones the best, but the ones on there are easier to make and have on hand as I’m writing.

@linus-smallprint

Have you tried using Inkarnet?

I really enjoy using them for my maps after I do the initial sketches.

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The next morning, Julian and Leon left to start another journey. They wouldn’t be returning to the capital, so Joseph sent no return letter to Sabina.

Joseph walked with the two former soldiers outside the gates of the town. It was good to be with old friends.…

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@linus-smallprint

(5 more minutes, and then we stop!)

SUCH A GOOD MOVIE!

Of course there’s the whole storks delver babies theory which isn’t true, (but I don’t know any people who still believe that)

but there are so many subtle things that are so, so good!

And the humor is chef’s kiss!

Okay, glad the scene works.…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I love the map!!!

Okay, have fund being a terrible person and making all your readers mad at you.

lol.

It is super frustrating tho. HE WAS ON THE RIGHT TRACK!!

*sobs*

@linus-smallprint

Alan, must you do something stupid????😩

@ellette-giselle

Just met the second crow, but I’m pausing to call something.

I think it’s his mother.

Maybe.

Ooh, good theory.

@stephie

Seriously, that gave me the ugh-the-main-character-is-doing-something-stupid sinking feeling in my stomach

Same.

@linus-smallprint

I think I may struggle with this partially be because my Dad and I are not very emotional and struggle with being sincere, and sometimes can seem stiff. My interactions with him naturally are what I refer to for these scenes, so Alan and Charles have picked it up.

.Ah, I see. I have a very close relationship with my Dad, so I…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint ah. Makes sense.

By the way, how did native-to-Earth animals get to Ehverwyld? I can see the otherworldly animals like vandergrits and dragons having been there since that world’s creation, but what about the crows and horses, etc.? Did they come through the same portals that humans did, but by sheer accident? were they created…[Read more]

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I have a fun question! I’ve already figured out my answer for my story, but I asked my friends this question and got so much traction that I wanted to post it here too. I love hearing what different people come up with. My f…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

lol. Poor Joseph. It must have been awful for him.

ah yes. Eric is very proud of himself.
good. Good! I’m so glad this scene works well! “touch down Tulip!!” (Storks if you haven’t scene the movie that quite come from)
 

I’m surprised there was no comment on the Julian/Joseph conversation.
was it good? Does it fit?

@linus-smallprint

that’s what (frustratingly) keeps me from being able to say this scene doesn’t work.

I don’t like you at all.

yes! Yes it does make sense, and I hate that I’m saying it, but it fits.

I doubly don’t like you.

I also agree that the interactions seem very stiff or formal, but I wasn’t sure if that’s what you’re going for.

@linus-smallprint ok!!

Let’s get to it!

-I see the king is trying to convince Oliver and Tyn to talk Alan into magic again. Yikes. I hope they don’t go through with it. I also read when Alan is going to try to use the magic himself, which won’t be good.

Why does the crow seem to be sentient? Why does it want him to use the magic? Is this…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint I’m still reading! I just haven’t had the chance to critique the chapters.

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Okay, I made the suggested changes to the last couple of sections, and I’m working on some more Joseph/Amelia interactions. I thought I’d just go ahead and post the next scene while I take care of the other stuff.

NEXT SECTION

After Leon and Julian left…

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@linus-smallprint

Just-

What-

No! 

Seriously, that gave me the ugh-the-main-character-is-doing-something-stupid sinking feeling in my stomach, so bravo. You can successfully torture your readers.

In chapter the 28th, I did notice that some of the dialogue between Alan and his father is a bit stiff. For example:

Alan gave his father a…

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@linus-smallprint

How did I know y’all were going to say this.

What did I tell you, Hybridlore? I said, I’m trying to work on the next section, but Linus is going to make me redo it and add some fillers.

grrrr.

Okay. Hmmm.

I’ll cut that scene you both agree on.

I’ll try to fill in some Joseph and Amelia stuff.

How much…

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@linus-smallprint

Just met the second crow, but I’m pausing to call something.

I think it’s his mother.

Maybe.

Also, I think you’re missing something?

He remembered the day General Pownce had given it to him. On that day, the lyen general had

Maybe “had said”

Oh shoot.

Linus!!!! WHY! I am furious with you right now. Just…[Read more]

@hybridlore

You sure did.It wasn’t a hard one tho.

Hmmm. I see what you mean.

I might switch that.

We’ll see what @linus-smallprint says.

Thanks so much for the feedback!