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whaley replied to the topic CRAZY WRITING WEEK IS BACK!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 3 months ago
@rae @loopylin @linus-smallprint @theshadow @keilah-h @theducktator I’m just tagging whoever comes to mind. I hope some of you will do this too, and if so, hope to meet you in the sprinting topic on Monday!
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whaley replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
OS I am very happy to here these two were your favourites.
Glad that makes you feel better!
Hmm. I might have to think through this one more. Tyn is a bit of a hot-head though.
You could maybe play off the fact that kentors naturally avoid confrontation. Although Tyn wants to face conflict directly, she might still be avoidant…[Read more]
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
I read your to-magic-or-n0t-t0-magic document and it seems to me that there are more reasons for including it than excluding it. At this point all you’ve got to do is evaluate whether or not the reasons for excluding spell images are so strong that they cancel out all of the numerous reasons to include it.
I dunno, it’s a hard call.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
One more thing I should mention. Another reason I saw this is because I took a break between when Amelia first starts feeling unwell and when she screams she has the plague
Okay then, I’ll just leave it.
Joseph getting discouraged because he is comparing himself to others is something that is quite relatable to me, so I think…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Oh I thought it was fine. It seems like a foretelling that she’s going to become a key character later on. As long as that’s true, I say keep it.
You’re welcome for the feedback!
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Stepheroni and Cheese replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
So what are your thoughts on this magic system? Since I want to write a story with a way that deals with intrusive thoughts that more people can be comfortable with reading, I want to know how I can make more of you comfortable with it. (I do recognize that there will always be someone out there who will be disturbed by it, but I…
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whaley replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
I have… a lot of feedback. *coughs*
Thank you Linus for giving me access to this story! I have a lot of thoughts and I hope they can be of some use to you! Obviously these are my opinions, so use them as you will. 🙂
Characters:
~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?
Love Tyn. H…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
I think it was a combination fo the letter and how Amelia was protesting at the beginning that she was not having plague symptoms.
hmm. Okay, do you think I should take out that part in the letter? Or should I just leave it and let the reader be happy that they guessed a plot twist or else shocked that they didn’t see…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 3 months ago
Thank you again. I would like to do this with the illustrations in the Narnia books someday.
That would be AWESOME! Oh you really, really need to do that!!!! Oh that WOULD BE SO COOL! Please do, and post them on her and tag me!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Thank you for taking my feedback so graciously. It’s hard having stances like this, (and many others) that seem silly or foolish. I think you’re the first person to take something like this that I said and not turn around and try to bite my head off or attack me. A lot of times people will ask me questions like this, and I’m…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@linus-smallprint Okay, I’m back.
Ellette does make a good point that it’s not about the images being creepy (trust me, it could be much worse), it’s just that she’s a bit uncomfortable with imagining them when they’re clearly sinful, even if it’s fake.
I can kinda get behind that.
But Whaley also has a point in that no matter what you…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 3 months ago
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HighScribe replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 3 months ago
That looks great!
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whaley replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 3 months ago
Thank you! Yes, Zuko was my favourite, along with his Uncle Iroh. I love redemption arcs, and Zuko’s was very well done.
Yayy!! We should totally make (or revitalize) a topic for that show. This forum needs to experience some great fanart for AtLA, and you are definitely the best artist for the job.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 3 months ago
I don’t know what about the drawing and screenshot makes we want to scream with delight, but there is just something….. the pose, the feel, the emotion…….. MAN! That is incredible that you drew that, and I love how you took the screenshot and turned it into your own style!
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whaley replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 3 months ago
AAH it’s Zuko!! I love Zuko so much. Well done; you translated the anime-like style of the show to your own interpretation, and it looks great! Was he your favorite character?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 3 months ago
I don’t even know what to say!
THAT IS INCREDIBLE!
That is so, so cool!!!!
WOW!!! I think that’s the best thing you have ever drawn that you’ve posted on here! WOW!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@theducktator  @linus-smallprint
My thoughts are not that a reader will be tempted to use magic. It’s just the fact of putting those images in their mind. Same as why we don’t write super graphic scenes or Rated R type scenes. It’s not that we’re worried the readers will graphically kill someone or commit adultery if they read it, it’s the f…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Oh, I almost forgot!
That section you just read has some HUGE changes for Joseph. What are your thoughts on where he has just arrived spiritually? Any thoughts on the connections he’s starting to make and the fact that he’s seeing the truth?
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@linus-smallprint I’m between @theducktator and @ellette-giselle on this, but I can’t explain now. Gotta finish my school work first, then I’ll get back to ya.
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