Linus Smallprint

@theshadow

No problem!! Thank you for all the help you have given!

@grcr

Ok then. You asked for it!!

Jonathan’s eyes widened in terror and his face went white. He had expected imprisonment and perhaps more interrogations. His mind had already been working through all the escape tactics he knew of. Now, he stopped short. Death? The thought had never crossed his mind. It was in that moment that Jonathan…

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Chapter 13

Decay

“Sssef! I’m not paying you to ssstand there doing nothing,” the Pythonos’s voice carried, snapping her back to attention.

“Yes sir,” she lowered her head, her cheeks flushing with embarrassment as her fellow workers all looked up from their work.

Shaking her head to clear her thoughts, she turned back to the pile of trash. I…[Read more]

@rae

I don’t think anyone was saying that you need to change Chase. Like Loopy and Whaley said, it’s not bad that he has that flaw, because he’s a flawed character that grows and changes in your story. We were just concerned that you were portraying him as more of a hero and that flaw was celebrated.

@whalekeeper @loopylin correct me if I’m wrong…XD

@theducktator

Sorry this took a minute! Here she is.

@elishavet-pidyon

Was competently blindsided. *picks slef up out of dirt and dusts off* “I feel like Calvin”

And as you love Peter Pevensie (from the BOOKS), and Smalden, draw beautifully, and like skirts, I feel an unavoidable obligation to join the welcoming team. So I shall have to make the most of it.

Aw, thank you! I’m so glad you like my…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Interesting plot turn! Looks like Sef and her mom are gonna have a forbidden child…… Interesting. I don’t have much to say yet. I would like to see how some of this starts panning out. I’m definitely intrigued enough to keep reading!

@keilah-h

Um no. Oh wait, I can’t say that ’cause it’s Monday. 🙁 lol.

Well, It’s Monday! I’m ready!!! Shoot!

@princesachronicle22 @hybridlore @grcr @koshka

Ok. Wow, I’m off for one day and the whole world tags me. You should see my inbox!!! lol. Ok, because I don’t want to go back and weed through who said what, I’m just tagging y’all who tagged me and replying to the world in general.

So, for the cover, it looks like I’ll be doing style seven.…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Hahaha 🤣🤣🤣

@whalekeeper

Thanks girl, that makes me feel a lot better 💗💗💗

You’re the best Whaley!!! <3

You literally ALWAYS know what to say!!! (:

Okay but actually….any of you guys that have read my book…

is it too dark??

I’m being legit…cuz now I’m scared…

not to take the focus off Whaley but all these concerns about stories being dark has got me paranoid

@whalekeeper @loopylin

Girl are you psychic or something? Because I couldn’t figure out exactly how I felt about Chase’s sacrifice until you just voiced it.

Exactly!!!! XD XD

@rae

Okay…after reading it again and reading the other’s comments…

I completely agree with @whaley and @loopy.

Chase has always kind of bothered me for the exact reason that Loopy said, but I couldn’t put it into words until I saw her post.

It doesn’t ever seem like he’s being “kind” because all it is is him beating himself up and feeling…[Read more]

@rae

DISCLAIMER: GRAMMAR NAZI PATRIOT RANT AHEAD.

My only critique would be the use of the word “alright”. It’s not technically a word. The correct term would be all right. I’m sorry, but that word just drives me insane. My forum signature is ridiculously accurate right now.

@loopylin

I’m listening to it now XD XD

@theshadow

hey, I know you read the first couple chapters! I’d love to hear your thoughts/critiques on the recent chapters if you have any! But if you’re busy I totally get it, summer can be soooo hectic!

Instead of digging through all these posts, you can use this link to view the whole novel (what I’ve revised so…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Do you have any other thoughts on the chapters you’ve read?