Linus Smallprint

@grcr

Woah, wait… wow. Thank you! 😄😄

You deserve it!! Man, you are super good!

Ohh… ok. I was concerned about that…

Honestly it looks exactly like the military uniform of his kingdom, which is sho0cking because I never told you what it looks like. lol.

@linus-smallprint

You described him having ‘chin-length hair’, so I looked that up for me…

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@linus-smallprint

I have no idea. I just found it.

@whalekeeper

I’lllet anyone else have a chance. Tomorrow I’ll come back and snipe you again.

If you survived today and didn’t kill this post. lol

@rae

I’m not very good at critiquing (at all) but I can still read them and give any feedback I can. Sometime. Probably not today ’cause I have work.

@whalekeeper

This is hilarious, which feels a bit mean to say, since I’m not the one doing planks, but it is.

But really this is kind of a good idea XD

@whalekeeper

Well if you’re still alive…. I did another 500.

You messed with a speed writer girl. That was a bad idea.

I will leave you alone now if you want.

@whalekeeper

You told me to. *shrug*

Btw, I have some other miserableness things you could do if you get tired of the plank.

Oh, I wrote 500 more words while you were busy with all that. Should I post them!!?

@whalekeeper

HERE YOU GO!!! NOW DO A PLANK!!!!

Ethan followed his brother, and the two wormed there way through the small entrance into the fort. Ethan sat up and saw that Jonas was looking in an open cardboard box. “Hey, I remember this!” He pulled out a flashlight and tossed it to Ethan.

Ethan raised his eyebrows. “Dad gave me this on my tenth…

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@rae

I have work today, but I’ll try to read this as soon as possible!

@rae  @linus-smallprint @grcr @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h

Okay y’all! Here I go.

Min

So one thing would be Friedrich is not left-handed, but I never specified that so that’s on me. His hair isn’t quite a wavy as I pictured, but otherwise he’s pretty spot on. I like the boots, though not quite the style I was thinking of either. Your shadin…[Read more]

@keilah-h

My dad is a “mechanic by necessity” as he likes to say.

@keilah-h

Ikr! My dad loves that one. So do my brothers.

@rae

Alright then!!

@linus-smallprint

That’s because I forgot about that one.

HAHA! that makes sense. I was trying to figure out what you changed. lol.

Just for fun, if either of you has soundtrack suggestions for my book, let me know.

ooo, will do!!

@linus-smallprint

Ooo, I like the Charles song!!

@linus-smallprint

WAY BETTER!

Ok, the magic thing is a little fuzzy still. I read it over several times and I think I have a good idea to where you could fix the whole thing very simply but make it so the reader understands using magic to stop from shattering wasn’t right.

“As time went by, we grew to love the power we had and started to allow o…

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@linus-smallprint

Reading now. Feedback in a sec

@linus-smallprint

Honestly, that was the obligation I felt writing this, so no wonder you picked that up from reading it.

lol. It felt like it.

I think your dad has some really good advice. I would go with that.

@highscribeofaetherium

No problem.

@ellette-giselle

Oh, yeah, I’m gonna sit out again 😑 sorry, everyone, that I’ve kinda just not been participating. I don’t have any good excuses :p