Linus Smallprint

@ellette-giselle @hybridlore

*promptly rescues Leon and Rolf, gives them new identities so they can hide from you and they disappear into the city* 
*straps on several guns and bolts. Snatches Alec and slams him against the wall.*

Girls are weird.

@ellette-giselle

 Things are about to get bad.

Ooooh

@stephie

Thank you!

@whalekeeper
Thank you! Maybe I should have tucked Alan’s elbow under the gate.

@keilah-h
Thanks for the tip on arm length!

@ellette-giselle

A man had Rolf in a tight grip, the point of a knife to his back. “Don’t move,” he growled at Leon.

Oh…!

Leon started in surprise. The robbers were being robbed!

There’s always a bigger fish.

Out of the frying pan and into the fire.

He motioned to two of his men, and they dragged Leon to his feet. “I will kill you both,”…

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@keilah-h

Okay. You kind of confirmed my suspicions (room for improvement 👍), but I’m glad Alan’s arms look fine to you. Thank you!

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @theducktator

I threw together a 9-point outline for Martha as well, since she will be a major point of view character in this book as well. It’s not quite complete, such as I’m not really sure what to do for her amplified pressure. But here is what I have so…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Actually, you know what would be funny? If one of the guys’ minds went in the same direction as mine and said something like ‘Yes, mom’ to Julian. And then, he would be stuck with that nickname for the rest of the story.

@ellette-giselle

 If he was joking would it work?

I think so. Make Aelic respond with another joke as well. Even if it just making a funny expression and saying “Ah”

Sure thing! I’ll wait until they’re published. 😉

Sounds good!

@hybridlore

In Canada, do you have the same guaranteed rights as in the US’s Constitution? I’m assuming it’s very similar. Freedom of assembly, freedom of speech, freedom of religion, etc.?

Yes, we do have the same rights, but that doesn’t stop teachers from grading things based on what you write about instead of the actual quality of writi…[Read more]

@stephie

Sorry I am late to reply.

Thank you for offering to help. However, would you mind waiting until I start posting chapters? I have a few people helping me with this already and I am hoping some people who are reading the draft I will be posting on here will not know what is happening in the story yet. Hopefully, it won’t be too long…[Read more]

A drawing of toothless I did for a friend. I tried out a bit of watercolour here.

I’m going to ask for some critique on this drawing regarding the proportions. I often draw characters separately, so am wondering how they fit together. I fear I may have made the horse too small. Also, what do you think of the character’s arm length?

@whalekeeper

Your figures look good. I usually do a harder outline around my characters to help distinguish them from the background. This was a tip I recall my Dad giving me a long while ago. The closer the object is to the front, the darker the outline should be. I also make sure my lines connect. If you’re asking about shading as well, I like…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

In my mind he says it in a joking way. Is that the impression you get? And if so, does it still sound like a mother?

No, I didn’t get that impression much. Maybe if you had mentioned him smiling, I imagined him with a serious/lecturing frown on his face as he said this.

Actually, this makes me think more of my grandma or sisters,…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Awkward bathroom conversations. Fun…

A monitor is watching. Creepy. I do know that feeling of, I could answer what I really think, but I know I will get bad marks. Although, the stakes are higher for Everette and Sara. Why does this class keep on reminding me of my Grade 11 English 20?

I see some family tension on the horizon in…[Read more]

@whalekeeper, thanks for the invite! I joined Kingdom Pen about a month after Kathleen stopped doing these and was disappointed she didn’t continue, so I’m glad to see you’ve started this up again.

I would like to improve my writing discipline. I tend to get distracted quite a lot and often feel that I could be doing a lot more than I am. I find…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Drawing out surprise and mystery is a good idea. Hybridlore may want to know it all now, but she has more reason to keep reading now. Sometimes, it is even a good idea to never reveal but only hint, to allow the reader to piece it all together herself.

As for the editing thing again, I see what you are saying now. I guess that…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

“Governor,” the man said, bowing low. “The gods have a message for you.” Before anyone had a chance to speak, he shot his hand out like a serpent striking and thrust it at Walter’s chest.

Ah, so that’s the assassination attempt. This raises the tension somewhat; not so sure what the impact will be in the long run though, as this m…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oh, never mind. I assumed there were only two sections posted when I was unable to log in. Now I see that third one. I will go read it right away!