Linus Smallprint

@theducktator @loopylin @stephie @theshadow @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

Longest chapter yet. Finally, we are starting to get into some Christian themes (turn your heresy radar on). I will try to get Chapter the 15th – The Saviour to you later this week.

Chapter the 14th – The Wizard

@keilah-h

I had an idea as to how all these creatures came about, and it has to do with the fact that their history is just a sci-fi version of ours. All the species are descended from humans and can hybridize with them and each other. My thought was “what if this was part of their version of the Tower of Babel event?” Like, at first there was onl…

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@ellette-giselle

Just was wondering if Aaron might feel a little weird about being a Dad to Joseph because of the small age gap and perhaps promise to be a big brother to the boy instead, but seems you are heading in the direction of Aaron and Sabina getting married and being parents to Joseph.

@ellette-giselle

He’s ten….. unless that seems to old for the way he acts.

Nahw, it works. My 14-year-old brother still gives us ‘simple’ solutions to problems that make sense to him so that he can do what he wants. Thankfully, none of them have involved me getting married.

The reason why I asked is with only a 9-year gap between him and Aar…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Noah’s trickery, which he learned when gambling, has now become a way to entertain children. I like it!

“Then get married,” replied Joseph.

Ah, the little boy who knows everything and has a ‘simple’ solution to every problem. I know this character. Remind me, how old is Joseph? 10 or 11, right?

Looking forward to the next part.

@theducktator
Okay, cool.

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @theducktator @whalekeeper

I think I got a solution to how I will deal with this problem now. Thank you once more for your help.

“Imagining alterations” sounds a little awkward and almost too scientific to me? – Keilah

“Imagining alterations” Kinda ups the creepy level in my opinion. It sounds pretty demonic and/or…

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@ellette-giselle

Thank you for the info. I’m nearly done with mine, (I just procrastinated. I always work better when the deadline is close.) I will try to get the drawing to you tomorrow.

@ellette-giselle

A couple of quick questions.

1. Does Friedrich, as a prince, ever train with a sword? If so, what type of sword?
2. What is the heraldry of Friedrich’s kingdom?

@ellette-giselle @theducktator @keilah-h @whalekeeper

Forks? Information on how to hurt people with them? What… has happened here?

Anyway, thank you all for your help. I think I need to think about this a bit more. A couple of you were asking if in the stories magic was a natural ability for the heroes. The stories I currently have are either…[Read more]

@keilah-h

oh, and your thing about puns being lost in translation was hilarious. I like how the narrator, whoever he is (or she? It feels like a he for some reason), is actually addressing the reader sometimes.

I was hoping someone would comment on that. It’s a pet peeve of mine when kids go through portals to other world and the characters the…[Read more]

@theducktator

I’ve been very busy the past few weeks. Sorry it took me so long to show up here. *hands you spinach ice cream* Anyway, I started your story, and I’m really enjoying it!

*Takes spinach ice cream, tries it* Ugh! Why did I suggest anyone should try this?

I’m glad you are enjoying the story. I understand you have been busy, so no wor…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I knew they were the faithful the minute I met Martha and Eric I knew it! I honestly did!

He he!

Hmm, I like Stripe. He’s going to be an interesting character.

He was the only character that I was not cringing at when rereading my first draft. Also, of all my characters in TNPT, he is probably the one I came up with first. I’m g…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

 Don’t you find it a little funny that Aaron is the one to bring the kids back after being the strongest opposer of the idea?

There is an irony in that, which was why I thought the chapter was good. I read the last section you posted as well.

“Finnick is fifteen. In a few years he could find a place of his own,” offered Sabina…

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@loopylin @stephie

Your tags did not work again. I think the secret to making them work involves not grabbing anything from before them when copying/pasting.

Also for those of you who might have missed it, I uploaded another image of a character introduced in Chapter the 13th to my Google Photos album: https://photos.app.goo.gl/pPdcEwEp2h22sswE8

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @loopylin @stephie @theshadow

Tis time for the next chapter. Thank you for your patience.

Chapter the 13th – The Guardian

@ellette-giselle

Maybe the fact that you are the first person to say that to me has something to do with it…… I normally get told to let other people be the authors of their own stories and stick to mine.

Okay. I am the author of this story and I won’t take every suggestion you have, but I do like to hear others ideas, so please don’t worry abo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

But then that makes right-handers day ALL THE OTHER days of the year!!! 😀

Perhaps, but that is less special.

Ok, I’m done giving un-asked for ideas.

 

Sorry.

Not sure why you are apologizing here. Your ideas are welcome.

@keilah-h

and ha I didn’t even notice that with Alan and Oliver in the beginning.

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@ellette-giselle

I just read the last section. I don’t have too much to say about it, but it was good!