Linus Smallprint

@theducktator @loopylin @stephie @theshadow @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

Next chapter. This is my Gospel chapter, the firehose of Christianity if you will. I hope that I am not being too forceful with this, I am hoping that any unbelievers who read this will consider what is being said instead of being turned off by it. It is a little weird since…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Thank you for the suggestions. I was kind of surprised that they were all movie soundtracks. Listening to the Ender’s Game one right now.

@ellette-giselle

I should also mention, it is good you include this scene. If you can inspire your readers to think of marriage more Biblically, that is excellent, especially in this day and age. Use Aaron and your story to guide your reader to think about this more deeply.

@ellette-giselle

“You two wouldn’t understand. Maybe when your older––” Aaron broke off, seeing the looks the two gave him. Then he laughed at himself. “I forgot, both of you are older then I am.”

Arron, you are really letting responsibility get to you too much. My brother tells me this when he’s trying to be funny.

Aaron is really studying his…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Just please let me share some good writing soundtracks (or any other thing you want to do soundtracks) with you. 🙂

Okay. What do you got?

@ellette-giselle

I can see why you got upset with the way everyone did the hair. Looks good! I take it this is of him when he is king?

@theducktator

Is your meme with Death in it from the book All My Friends are Dead?

@whalekeeper

This is an… interesting idea. I don’t know if I will participate, but seems you have a few other volunteers.

@grcr

Congratulations! You are at two wins now! I don’t know if I’ve asked you this or not yet, but what software do you use for your drawings?

@keilah-h

Congratulations on second place!

@ellette-giselle

Again with the hair! 

You described him having ‘chin-length hair’, so I looked that up for men, and drew what I found. I suppose…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I was kinda surprised when that was the song that came up when I clicked the link but I’m not complaining haha 

Never be surprised if a song I provide is from a video game. Most of the music I listen to is from video games.

Also, I realized I forgot to answer your question from earlier.

one question: Did Jesus come to die in this un…

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@ellette-giselle 

WAY BETTER! 

Good!

Ok, the magic thing is a little fuzzy still.

That’s because I forgot about that one. Oops. Thanks for the suggestion though, I think I have a good idea on how to fix this.

@keilah-h

Ooo, I like the Charles song!! – Ellette

OOH I LOVE THAT SONG. – Keliah

Ocarina of time does have a good soundtrack. Just fo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I updated Chapter the 13th with your suggestions. Would you mind taking a look at it again please and see if this is working better? (The only parts I changed were from right after the description of Charles to when he begins to tell his story, so don’t worry about the rest of the chapter.)

Also, on a side note, I still have not…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

If I’m going to be blunt here, reading it I felt like you as the author felt an obligation to let me know that I am still aloud to read fantasy books, so you through that in and then moved on.

Honestly, that was the obligation I felt writing this, so no wonder you picked that up from reading it.

So yeah, I would 100% recommend m…

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@keilah-h

Also, none of this will really be in the story anywhere, but for the sake of completeness I like having as much of my worldbuilding planned out as I can, so I could honestly forgo the topic completely and it won’t change the storyline.

Honestly, I don’t really know why I’m so concerned about this, considering I only have one story set i…

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@ellette-giselle

It’s very good, but the whole reading fantasy seemed like you started to go into it and then pulled back and skirt5ed the whole problem. I feel like if it’s going to be there at all it needs more. At the moment it feels kinda like “Why?” If you have nothing more to say on the matter, I would consider cutting it.

Hmm. I didn’t…[Read more]

@rae

I seem to remember you saying you were developing your style. Is your drawing the result? It looks really good.

@ellette-giselle

Here is my take on Prince Fried Rich. I was going to give him light brown pants, but I did not have a good pencil crayon for that, so I switched to black. Anyway, I think he needs some pointy ears and a ridiculous amount of equipment on his back, eh?

@theducktator @loopylin @stephie @theshadow @ellette-giselle @keilah-h

Longest chapter yet. Finally, we are starting to get into some Christian themes (turn your heresy radar on). I will try to get Chapter the 15th – The Saviour to you later this week.

Chapter the 14th – The Wizard

@keilah-h

I had an idea as to how all these creatures came about, and it has to do with the fact that their history is just a sci-fi version of ours. All the species are descended from humans and can hybridize with them and each other. My thought was “what if this was part of their version of the Tower of Babel event?” Like, at first there was onl…

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@ellette-giselle

Just was wondering if Aaron might feel a little weird about being a Dad to Joseph because of the small age gap and perhaps promise to be a big brother to the boy instead, but seems you are heading in the direction of Aaron and Sabina getting married and being parents to Joseph.