Linus Smallprint

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There was a little box holding the ring that had been his mother’s. Her favorite shawl was folded beside his father’s hunting knife. His very own Bible lay with the treasures, and beside it were several shiny stone from the creek that flowed through his father’s farm. Joseph leaned forward and set the papers gently back into the b…

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@ellette-giselle

Forgot your tag on the previous post

“I don’t know. He finally got to a point where he stopped threatening to kill us every other minute. But from then on, he just listened silently. When he left, he made no indication that he was ever coming back. all I know is something changed his mind in respect to killing us. Beyond that…” Noah shrugged again.

It occurs to me that Sabina…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

You grandness has inspired me to write some possible bad poetry.

*Ahem*
Magic Potato in the chat,
I’m sitting at your welcome mat.
If I may if I might:
(for I think I have a right)
I admit, I can be shy,
When I know not the reason why,
Some benefits, I’d like to see.
A potato, why should I be?
(please)

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow

Sadly, I do not know if I am going to get another chapter to you this week. I had a plan for it, and it was going well, but then one of my characters was taken hostage and is threatening to ruin the whole rescue mission and I can’t figure out how to get him out of there. Alan…[Read more]

@keilah-h
Thanks!

@ellette-giselle

I am editing up the next section an should post it soon. 

Good. I’m going to be working on my own book/school assignments, so I probably won’t read it until my break at work.

So wait, are you older or younger then your brother?

I’m the eldest. Remember that whole eldest child sympathy party I started with Martha?

Yes, God can…

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@ellette-giselle
I’m back!

You and thinking my characters are older then they are! What is it with you!? lol.
Actually, it wasn’t so bad as last time. Adrian is younger then Aaron was, so yes, seventeen. (what made you guess that number?) He’s seven years older then Joseph. I have a sweet little friend at church who is seven years younger then i a…

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@ellette-giselle

 Forth section:

Joseph looked up at Darrien. His face was white, and his finger’s tightened on the door frame. He used his other hand to gently push Joseph back. “Please, the children had nothing to do with it, nor did the women. I was the one who hid him. Take me but leave the others.”

This felt unessasary. Julian only said t…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Poor Linus. You’ll have so much catching up to do. Sorry.

Yeah, yesterday was rather busy. Oh well. I have time today.

(By the way, I should let you know that I’m not bothering to read the  feedback others are giving you, so if anything has come up that you want more thought on, please let me know.)

Feedback for the third se…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Feedback for the second section:

Don’t have too much to say about this one. Joseph kind of falling back to where he was before, but it is easy to see why.

He could hear Noah and Sabina praying together, and for a moment he thought Aaron was captured, for this was how it had been.

This is a nice peak back into what they were all…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

NEXT SECTION!!!!!!

Okay, that’s a lot of exclamation marks. You know five exclamation marks is a sure sign of madness, right? But you couldn’t settle for five, you went for six. (But who am I kidding, we’re all authors. Madness is sure to come with that.) Ellette, what are you doing to Joseph?

Feedback for the first of those…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Wooph! Got a lot to catch up on! Let’s see how far I get before I have class…

It was actually not Betsy. It was Corrie and Betsy’s Niece, Peter and Reuben’s brother, and it was Peter and Reuben who were under the table because someone had seen them with the Jews and informed on them. (At least, that’s what it say’s in Corrie’…

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@ellette-giselle

Question:

What would you do if you lived in Germany during WWII and you were hiding a Jewish couple and their baby. The Nazi’s came pounding on the door and said, “Are you hiding Jews?”/”where are the Jews?” etc. (which btw they often asked this type of question to scare people into telling the truth)

What would you say?…

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@ellette-giselle

So, even though this doesn’t sound pleasant, what I ended up doing was reading the chapter through and then rewriting it completely, using the old chapter as a reference point for events that needed to happen and dialogue I wanted to keep.

That is what I’m doing as well, but either my new ideas are much better than my old or my q…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I would be interested in your reasons behind why you don’t agree with her/my reasoning. Though keep in mind I won’t be changing this scene, so if you find it a waste of time then don’t bother explaining.

To put it simply, it is impossible for God to lie (Hebrews 6:18). Now of course, things are different for God, but Jesus, in Hi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

 This is one of the best ones yet!!

Huh. You often supprise me with the scenes that you think are the best.

I’m curious, did you write this from scratch, or was it in the draft?

In my first draft, I was unsure if I wanted to send Alan to save The Faithful after he joined them. Event happened differently there. Alan found out ab…[Read more]

@keilah-h

 It does seem a tiny bit sudden, but I don’t know cause I’ve never actually seen a person get saved and them follow their life immediately afterward. 

Alan does feel a little bit rushed to get back to planning since other people are in danger. He also felt the need to apologize to Rour, and had to go through Stripe to get to him.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I was a little distratded during this chapter because I do disagree with you on weather or not it is okay for Christians to lie to protect others. However, I don’t really have a response to the arguments that Sabina gives and I belive this to be a tercarary issue, so unless you want to discus this, I’m willing to leave it…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Troy was a big hint. I also some some other things from it that poped up in my feed that contained some greek mythology gods/creatures, so I thought that might be the case