Linus Smallprint

@ellette-giselle

Now if only Joseph remembers this……

I guess we will find out.

Yeah. That’s because it’s so much easier to write about people closer to your own age.

I know. And even when there are characters who are older, it is much easier to leave them at home when all the young people go out on an adventure. I’m trying to work on an older c…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

March 12th

A nice peek into Aaron’s past.

Goodbye to Eric, Asher, Sabina, Darian and Alicia. Until next time.

“Stop right there,” the other guard barked. He looked over his shoulder and then drew near. “Hand over the bag so we can search it.”

Joseph nearly froze. Just beneath the cloak at the top of his bag was his Bible,…

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@ellette-giselle

“Geed,” Joseph replied. “How are Asher and Eric?”

Good?

Joseph lifted his head and looked at Sabina. “Thank you for telling me.”

Now the question is, how well is Joseph going to remember this conversation?

Looks good!

Realized I had forgotten all about Alan’s horse, Trace. Whoops! I’m going to have to go back and fix that.

@theducktator

Thank you for the typo fix!

@highscribeofaetherium

Nice fox. I think this looks very neat!

@ellette-giselle

Please be honest as y’all read this, because saving the boys is going to be a HUGE change. However, I think it may be the right one, and some interesting things happened that makes me think so. However, I am still on the edge, and I want to know in your honest opinion which direction seems best to take. (of course we all love A…

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@ellette-giselle

Do you think it’s fine as long as this is the last one……. (for a while.)

This appears to be what is moving the Ardentaians and some of the soliders to question who the Christians are.

I think part of the problem is that, yes, this is causing more people to become Christians, and that is good of course, but characters are disap…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I thought you said to go ahead and kill them.

Yes, I did in a way. But that doesn’t mean I like to read about the executions. It does get depressing. Especially since we have to be there for it again. At least this time, the crowd reacted differently.

@ellette-giselle

Hmm, wow, must have really sobered you. No comment on the amount of exclamation marks. lol. After I posted it, I looked back and was like, “wow, there’s a lot.” lol. 

*Goes back to look.* 15?!? *Calls a doctor.*

And no comment on the fact that I offed Joseph’ best friends.

You’ve already killed off his father and two very close fr…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Okay. well, the Stripe one of course. That would be super funny/cute, especially with his ears flat. lol.

Maybe one of Martha and Alan talking. I would like to see Martha in an actual scene.

i’ll have to think more on this.

Do you mean the scene where Alan is about to head out with the Humlers and Oliver to find his d…[Read more]

@stephie

As for the actual plot of everything, I really like what you did with the crow there. Ties in nicely. I’m curious as to what the king’s doing. Is he trying to help Alan? It may be that because he was interested in Alan’s success, he ordered the arrests of the Faithful in order to get rid of one of the wizard’s obstacles. But now, will he…

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@ellette-giselle

“Today, the gates of every village, town and city will be thrown wide open! You will return to your homes, if you wish. You will farm the land; you will travel and trade where you will within Ardenta!” 

Ah. So there was a positive event in there. This is what you were referring too.

“Let them go!” came a shout.

Joseph looked a…

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@ellette-giselle

Aside from Stripe being hugged, I really enjoyed the chapter.I’m glad you brought the crow back in. I was wondering how long it would be before you tied that part of the plot back into the story.

I haven’t been entirely sure how to fit it in all the time. Especially since many of its scenes are just it watching and Alan being a l…[Read more]

@stephie @ellette-giselle

YEEEESSSS!!!!!

STRIPE HAS BEEN HUGGED!!!!

*does a happy dance* – Stephie

Yippy! Stripe was HUGGED!!!! – Ellette

*Bows*

AWWWWW! it was soooooo cute!!!!!! Now you have to draw a picture of it!!!

Maybe. This is a question I will ask at the end, but so far, what would the top scenes that you would like to see illustrations for be?

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Next chapter! I’ts been a while since I’ve done two chapters in one week, but I got excited by this one and put off some school. So here you go!

This is the chapter where my book will be redeemed in the eyes of Ellette, Ducktactor, and Stephie. I hope you’re all…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Okay. So you are coming off as a little cold-hearted, but there is something this section did for me that you may be all right with.

This section established the fact that no one is safe.

Protagonist, side-character, mentor, or any of them could suddenly be captured and killed. There is no plot armor. I thought before that you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Something was about to happen that would change everything.

Why was I expecting this to be something positive? It kind of made the event feel like a slap. (Ouch. I’m feeling Josephs pain.) Unless I misunderstood what this event ended up being?

It also feels more tragic because of how casually Eric and Asher headed out. It was…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

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