Linus Smallprint

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A moment later, he drew it out. It was a dark crossbow bolt.

Interesting the church Leon talked about the war of Faith is the one that fell apart the most, but I guess they are in the capital where the most danger is.

Julian’s sermon is fine, but I think he needs to remind them more of what they are fighting for. What the reward…[Read more]

@keilah-h

yeah, it’s just a first draft, those are never, ever perfect. Some can get close to how the end story is, but there’s inevitably gonna have to be at least one scene you cut, one set of dialogue you rework, one characters whose role changes, etc.

Thanks, Keilah!

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Chapter 27 out!

This chapter took an unexpected direction. I never thought I would be writing that sort of thing. *shivers* But then again, Andrew Perterson had something like it in his first Wingfeather book.

@ellette-giselle

Now I’m just confused.

Good.

Philippians 4:13 is a verse people like to take out of context when they set their eyes on a goal, like win a sports game.

The point is that context is key, and by removing it, it can be easy to twist verses into excuses to do what we want. Like what Satan did when he tempted Jesus.

@whalekeeper

CEW == Crazy Editing Week?

I don’t have anything to edit right now, so don’t think I will join. But thank you for the invite!

@ellette-giselle

Well, as Philippians 4:13 says:

“I can do all things…” with a Bible verse taken out of context.

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Though I do recall some villains in book 2 at least who tried to tempt Joseph by telling him that suffering wasn’t worth it. I just think Karl is more interesting because he has some understanding of Christianity, and has the potential to make a stronger argument.

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“I was one of them,” Andreas said. “That one night when we were threatening you, you looked straight at me, and you said it wasn’t too late. I never forgot those words.”

Ah… Okay, I remember him.

Remind me… are the Steins the family Julian, Aelic, and Roland were staying with when Leon and Rolf caught up to them?

Ba…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Well, you don’t have to change it, but it’s up to you.

Other ideas if you want them: Nickolas, Charles, Clive.

(I grabbed these names from a very specific source that I cannot name.)

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Ugh. But I like his name. *pouts*

Then stash it in for a different character. It’s not a bad name.

@ellette-giselle

Yes, it does. In fact, I like that idea. I’ll make a few tweaks.

Okay!

Ah yes, well, we were in Leon’s POV at the time.

I should make myself pay more attention to whose POV you are using, because I haven’t really other than when they are separated.

btw, any thoughts on Andreas?

I’m trying to recall people from the last book. Per…[Read more]

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They reached the green and came to a stop. The castle-like University–– haven to so much work in the spread of Christianity–– was nearly destroyed. It had been hit many times by siege weapons, and the towers and walls were caved-in and crumbling.

Wow. They really hated that university. Yikes. No survivors again?

“He’s one of the…

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All right. Have fun with that!

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Chapter 26 out!

I feel like the quality of these recent chapters hasn’t been as good, and I’m loosing steam. But I need to remeber that this is just the first draft. Fell free to provide… motivation to get me to keep going until then end. (Interoperate that how you will. I know,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ah. Not sure what version I like better. Gravitating towards the one I already know, but only because it is familiar.

This is the version we sing at our church. Is it the same one your church uses?

Any thoughts on that? Do you think it’s good that it’s just back to Leon and Jul…

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How long, oh Lord, how long
Will this go on, go on?
How long, oh Lord, how long
Will this go on, go on?

Was this song inspired by Psalm 13? We have a similar hymn we sing at out church inspired by that Psalm.

So they are headed back now. I guess they couldn’t hide in the mountains forever. I think you chose just the right moment…[Read more]

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Chapter 25 out!

I don’t think I want this to be James. This is too similar to Eric. Both characters feel unappreciated, and grow depressed because they don’t fit in and feel. The only thing different is James has hope in The Saviour so he’s less self centered and is more outgoing.…[Read more]

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Wow. This has always been a favorite section of mine but, i must know, why did you say that? What makes this one stand out so much?a

The chase. Most of the time, when soldiers show up, we realize that this is it. For example, when Joseph and his family were arrested. We know there is only a slim chance of escape before they are…[Read more]

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I have to say, this was probably one of the most exciting sections I’ve ever read in this series.

Julian, Ernst, Rolf, and Walter have gone out hunting today.

Not Roland? I know he just got married, but that man loves hunting, and its not like he’s going on a honeymoon right now. They should at least invite him to be…[Read more]

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Two deaths and a wedding. That sounds like a book title all on its own. It’s nice to have a happy moment to balance out the tragedy of the deaths.

“I’m starving! I feel like I haven’t eaten in days. Wake up Julian, let’s go find breakfast.”

Plot Armour!

(No, don’t think you need to change this. Plot armour is inevitabl…[Read more]