Linus Smallprint

@stephie and @keilah-h

Are either of you going to be filling out the feedback document I provided earlier?

@stephie

I read your to-magic-or-n0t-t0-magic document and it seems to me that there are more reasons for including it than excluding it. At this point all you’ve got to do is evaluate whether or not the reasons for excluding spell images are so strong that they cancel out all of the numerous reasons to include it.

I dunno, it’s a hard cal…

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@whalekeeper

You could maybe play off the fact that kentors naturally avoid confrontation. Although Tyn wants to face conflict directly, she might still be avoidant without realizing it.

Hey, that’s a good idea. There are already some inconsistencies in Tyn’s character that she is unaware of. This would fit her well.

I knew he wanted out of the…

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@ellette-giselle

Finished it!

I’ll get to answering your feedback questions later. I may take a month to reread the story again first. (*Goes and steals all sections of the book so I can read them offline*).

But for now, here is some initial feedback on the last bit:

I think the climax and the build-up to it were well done. As cliche as rescue…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

hmm. Okay, do you think I should take out that part in the letter? Or should I just leave it and let the reader be happy that they guessed a plot twist or else shocked that they didn’t see it.

One more thing I should mention. Another reason I saw this is because I took a break between when Amelia first starts feeling unwell and w…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Thank you very much for your feedback. It was helpful. I think I now have a clearer picture of what I need to work on.

@whalekeeper

Love Tyn. …like Eric, too.

Glad to hear it. These two were the least liked by my readers in the first draft. Tyn is pretty much the same. I think she is just a love-or-hate character. Eric was a disaster, and I almost removed him from the story altogether before I decided to change his role and personality because I realized he…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Don’t have to much to ask you, but:

Martha. Especially some Alan/Martha moments. *blink blink blink. Blinkity-blink blink* lol.

I would still like to know what your thoughts were on switching to Martha in that second-last chapter.

Just that this was a great book and one that I would totally buy. Well done! Keep me in the loop if…

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@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle

I do have some questions/comments to your overall feedback. I will start with Ellette since she posted first.

@whalekeeper

Sorry, I didn’t realize you had replied to this before I logged off yesterday. Thank you for your thoughts as well. I was talking to my dad about the issue and he had similar thoughts.

@stephie

On the other hand, it’s magic. It’s directly contradictory to everything Christians stand for. The Fall of man happened because humans didn’…

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@highscribeofaetherium

Thank you!

@ellette-giselle

Okay, why is that? Was it just because that seemed logical, or because you thought I was above killing a girl, (I’ll have you know I’m not. lololololol) or because Amelia brought up wanting a child in her letter to Sabina? If I struck that part of the letter, would you have been caught off guard?

I think it was a combination fo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @theducktator @whalekeeper @stephie

One question I forgot in my feedback file under Worldbuilding:

Any topics you recommend I research to improve worldbuilding and make it more realistic?

Also, I somehow completely forgot to add Stripe to my list of characters I’m most eager for feedback on.

@ellette-giselle

I love how you took the screenshot and turned it into your own style!

Thank you again. I would like to do this with the illustrations in the Narnia books someday.

@whalekeeper

you are definitely the best artist for the job.

Thank you again! My drawing skills are a gift from God, and while I have had to practice lot to get to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

So, yeah. There’s my thoughts. I’m probably alone on this stance, but this is what I believe.

Well thank you for sharing them. I’m very glad you did. Sometimes I get the feeling that some of my readers think something I write is overly weird/wrong, but don’t tell me because ‘it’s just his thing’ or ‘you do you’. There was som…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

WOW!!! I think that’s the best thing you have ever drawn that you’ve posted on here! WOW!!!

Thank you! It really helped that I didn’t have to come up with the pose myself.

Here is the screenshot I used as a reference:

@whalekeeper

AAH it’s Zuko!! I love Zuko so much. Well done; you translated the anime-like style of the show…

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I’ve been trying to draw my characters recently, but have been struggling to do so, with something feeling wrong to the point where I cannot even finish an outline before I erase the whole thing. I’ve realized I’ve let the need to make a drawing perfect become too important to me and got stuck comparing my art to some proficient artists. There is…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Still working my way through your last sections. I am at the part where they just finished finding a verse for each letter in the alphabet. (That was kind of a fun game. You had me go and check the ESV for verses that start with ‘X’)

When Amelia started feeling unwell, I kind of suspected she might be pregnant.

It’s always the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @theducktator @whalekeeper @stephie

I’ll leave Shadow and Loopy out of this since I haven’t heard from them on here for quite a while.

I am now ready to talk about my magic system. Why is it the way it is? Well to understand that, we need to start talking about book two. I am going to have to spoil it a bit, but you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Also, why does that racoon picture have an expression that so fits what I know of you? lolololol.

Dunno. He way too chubby to be me though.

My signature quote is a modified quote from Andrew Peterson. The full version is the following:

Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to show how beautiful is the prick…

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