Linus Smallprint

@ellette-giselle

Does that make sense?

Yes, that does.

But I did!

I guess so. Sorry, I was reading Ray Comfort’s book The Way of The Master and he puts a very large emphasis on convincing people that they are sinners. I’m not entirely sure his ways are right (he does make it sound as if it is up to us whether or not a person is saved, even though…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I have made it to the 26th chapter of your WIP. Having read so much now, I can tell you have put a lot of thought into your world-building. You’ve got a variety of cultures, locations, and races. I can tell you’ve put thought into the history as well.

However, I have also gotten far enough to determine something else. Due to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Mercy, on the other hand, is not so prevalent in their beliefs. They’ll show mercy should it benefit them…. or if it plays into some twisted game their enjoying.

Ah. I remember for Aaron, it was so that he would use his skills to turn people to the gods of the empire. What was it for Joseph and his friends?

Duly noted. Though the…

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@ellette-giselle

I haven’t read the latest section just yet, but here are my thoughts on the previous one. Got a few of them this time.

Julian and Leon. “Come,” he said in a low voice. “She knows you are here, and she is waiting.”

Julian shook his head, and Leon spoke. “No, Rolf.”

If you are still looking for ideas on how the two former sold…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

also, if KP glitches and you don’t get all the notifs, I try to post at least once a day, so if you check I’ll most likely have posted something between 5:00 in the morning and noon.

Gotchya. I assume this dosen’t include Sundays?

I will read the section you just posted later today.

@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @theducktator

Finished what I know of the outline. You can use the same link as last time. Any thoughts or ideas to fill in the holes? What do you think of it?

@theducktator

I recognised your account. You have access now.

@ellette-giselle

Don’t scare me like that!

@ellette-giselle

Access granted to Elethwyn R. (That is you, right?)

I will have to give you access for the link. I’m being secretive with this right now.

@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @theducktator (your late, but fine, I will let you join. Last one.)

 Here is the link to what I have done on my outline so far. I’ve just written down everything I am confident with at the beginning. I will add my ideas for the middle part and what I know of the ending later (Maybe tomorrow. I should have time…[Read more]

@theducktator @ellette-giselle

If we are going to compare a Narnia character to Eric, I think Eustace is a better fit. He and Eric are both kind of wimpy. And Eustace becomes a dragon.

Though I understand why you would grab Edmund, since Edmund betrays his family.

@ellette-giselle

They’re names are German! This is where you start to feel some of the German cross– beyond the complection. (Leon and Julian are also German names. Julian being the German version of Julius, which is very Roman. Little glimpse into the world of naming which is an obsession of mine.)

Ah. That’s a good idea.

Thank you for the pro…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I can see the dilemma. I think it is good that Leon and Julian are trying a more subtle approach. I think @hybridlore‘s suggestion is good. They wouldn’t have to lie then.

But they are going to have to come out with the truth eventually.

Leon and Julian might not necessarily take the correct option first as well. It might be…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

In this chapter, you did a better job of showing Leon and Julian are in a place they used to call home. And I’m not just referring to their comments upon seeing the village in the valley. Their interactions with the Klein family, falling right into the traditions, showed this even better than their words.

I like the feel of the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

What section? Kingdom Pen, why didn’t you tell me about this? *Goes back to read*

@rae @ellette-giselle

@theducktator

I’m not sure I like that last comparison. Kalmar is amazing, and Eric…drives me crazy. No offense. I’m just still mad he betrayed Martha.

Who would you compare Eric to then?

@whalekeeper

You know what, I changed my mind. The more I think of it, I should have done this:

@keilah-h

Alan looks a good deal less….bookish?…..than Alcatraz (where did he get THAT name anyway? Who wants to be named after an island with a jail on it?) though

Alcatraz was named after Alcatraz the First, a famous occulator who lived around the same time that the pyramids were built. Alcatraz’s family frequently uses these traditional nam…[Read more]