Linus Smallprint

@ellette-giselle

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@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper

Good. I might still check with my sister to see what she thinks, but if you both like it, then I think I might go swap the ending.

@ellette-giselle

So yeah, now Joseph is officially nineteen. I’ll have to let everyone know.

Ooph. That sudden rapid aging has to come with a terribly painful growth spurt.

As for the children and wife thing, I know that Timothy wasn’t married at the time, and he was an elder. (Timothy is kind of my Joseph stencil.) Anyways.

Ah yes, of course, goo…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I simply mean what I described. 👍 I’m not sure how it compares with the rest of your feedback discussions… I have very little context. XD

Okay. I did just post a rewritten version above. So you can also read that and see what you think.

Thanks for the link by the way! I can’t guarantee I’ll read it soon, but now I have it on my rada…

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@ellette-giselle

So I’m not the only one who does this.

I think it comes naturally. We tend to write what we know. One of my friends who plays D&D had a character he tried to make completely different from him. This character was a lying scoundrel, but my friend himself is honest, so his character ended up being more honest than he intended.

I d…

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@theducktator

I hope Eric gets captured though.

Isn’t that a little harsh? I mean, consider Martha. How do you think she would feel if her brother was captured in order to free her? The poor girl. She will be much happier if she is able to be with one of her family members again in hiding, even if it is his fault she was captured in the first place.

@whalekeeper

my apologies, if you make the earlier chapters available then I will read them 😋

Everything I’ve posted so far should be available in that last link I posted (I just did the link for the chapter a little differently when I was asking for ideas to end it). If you click on Contents in the top left corner, you should get a list of all…[Read more]

@theshadow

I agree with what @raxforge said and would like to add to it.

Not only does God glorify himself through all that he does, he works all things to the good of those who love Him (Romans 8:28). So Satan also exists for our good.

Put it this way. Another question people ask is ‘Why does God allow sin to exist?’ or ‘Why did God create us…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I may be TOTALLY off on this, but i feel like you yourself have not gotten into Eric an tried being him. If that makes sense.

This is kind of a funny and ironic thing to say. Of all my characters, I was not expecting you to say this about Eric. Confession time. Most of my characters are me in some way. Alan is my worries, guilt,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

A teenage elder does seem wrong. Looking at the qualifications for an Elder in 1 Timothy 3:1-7 and Titus 1:6-9, they don’t explicitly state any age, and I can see you’ve been setting up Joseph to meet the requirements listed here, but they do seem to require someone who is mature. I don’t think it would be right to trust a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Ah, okay.

In that case, I don’t want to dig into it too much at the moment, since his character is going nowhere else in book 1, but I definitely am planning to deal with this in book 2. Maybe I will see if I can add a sense of shame into the end of that last chapter, but that will be it.

Where exactly are you hoping Eric’s…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yup. Sure did. My dad was stationed in Italy, and there you travel by REAL trains. With several carriages and an engine. We used to spend our vacations in Edelweiss Germany up in the alps. I’ve also been to Austria, Rome, Greece, and Switzerland. I wish I could do it again now that I’m older and can appreciate it. Although, liv…

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@ellette-giselle

Ugh. It deleted my reply.

Try Ctrl A then Ctrl C before you post your reply to save it to your clipboard in case it decides not to work. Then you don’t have to retype anything. (Make sure you are on the ‘Text’ tab of the text editor.)

I feel like you kinda brushed over the shame thing with Eric, and I’m hoping that’s because he’…

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@ellette-giselle

*gasp*!!!! You stole my book!!!!!!!! How dare you!!!

I dare. And I’ll do it to this one too! Ha ha!!! (Also, you are at 8 exclamation marks now. I think I have good grounds to be concerned.)

Oh my goodness! Did you just say “taking the train to school”!!!! THAT IS AWESOME!!! I used to take trains a lot when I lived in Europe, but…

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@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow

Next chapter. This was getting a little long and I realized I didn’t have too much planned for chapter the 26th, so I decided to move the climax of the rescue into the next chapter. I should hopefully get that to you by the end of this week.

Chapter the 25th – The Rescue

@ellette-giselle

Listened to the song. I hadn’t heard of this before. The song does fit well.

Yes, it is a time jump!!!! If it’s too jolting, I may split the sections into parts. I’ll see what Linus says.

You could do different parts. Right now, the first part kind of feels like a separate story to what you are getting into now, but you may end…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I had no idea what that picture was from. i just saw the meme the other day and thought of it. It was perfect.

Ah, okay. It’s from a show that people had been recommending to me for a while, and I have finally had a chance to start watching it. The meme fits with the personality of the older character in it well.

Let’s just say, a…

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@the_lost-journal

Fun! I was slightly confused with the first section at the end because I did not realize that the portal appeared because of the Storyteller’s writing.

@whalekeeper

I just decided to read that chapter completely out of order. I’ve only read up to chapter 5 besides this, I think, and that was a while ago. XD I can give some feedback about this chapter, as someone who read it without any context whatsoever. 

You know that reading books like this is the number one cause of cancer in domesticated fr…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Okay, well i don’t like him very much. he seems weak and kinda sulky. I mean. I don’t know, he’s a coward, and I don’t like cowards. I feel a redemption arch, but at the moment it’s hard to see. So yeah, I’m hoping for redemption, but I’m not liking him right now.

Ah, okay.