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@rae

Broooo I just realized you and Rumi from K-Pop Demon Hunters would get along

Lucille

“You save their butts from dying and they hate you because of irregularly distributed pigmentation? These people sound stupid. Chihuahua brains. You should ditch them.”

@elishavet-pidyon

lol, well thanks. I get told I’m crazy or weird all the time. XD

haha. It’s not me always either. But I feel like readers view us as always thinking that. XD

@ellette-giselle

Those are great. I think there’s a little bit of crazy in all of us. XD

Also, the last one is fabulous. I don’t think I’ve done that as an author, though. I’m usually the reader watching on in horror, lol!

Ivyyyyy Greeeeeeennn. Nooooooo!

By “kid” he’s obviously more of a teen, lol.

I actually have a similar drawing I could use some critique on. It’s of Elrond as a kid. I intend to add Elros too. (I’m only a little bit of a LotR/Silmaril nerd, unless it concerns these two. I realized how many amazing twin brothers are in this family, and now I want to know their story, lol. And write a fanfic. Save their uncles… 🥹 The…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Gabriel Mai

Gabriel shook his head. “It isn’t proper for a Protector to share his secret with many people. Besides, if they discovered my birthmarks, the fact I’m the Protector wouldn’t save me. I’ve already been marked as a demon by my previous village, and they’ve all seen the Protector fight at some point or another.” The red…[Read more]

@grcr

I don’t know who got shot!

@rae I like both pictures! The second one looks like he’s moving, which I think is neat. The only thing I’d like better about the other is that I do like the wind coming from behind him/how it pushes his hair forward and frames his face. I’m enjoying imagining them happening right after each other in a scene, like he turned around. 😀

@ellette-giselle

lol there was a space in the actual doc, I don’t know why it didn’t transfer over…

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a soldier he would know this from training and wouldn’t need to be told. I would say something like “swear the oath” etc. Something that tell…

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@hybridlore

lol, thanks. XD

True, true.

We’ve become proficient in anarchy. Says a lot about the quality of our group…. Not sure what, but it says a lot of it.

@grcr

Good scene! I’m still not really sure what happened at the end… but yeah, I was expecting the dad to die too. 😅🥲

I like the siblings too (although their names are confusing, haha.)

@theducktator

Yay! Hope you feel better soon!

@ellette-giselle Haha, your signature! XD

@grcr

You are very welcome!!

Okay sounds good.

Okay, for a little more editorial feedback…..

and Emrysrushed

Second to last paragraph, you just need a space there.

And then structurally,

Put your right hand to your chest…”

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a sol…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

eeeee yay!! 😃 I’m pretty much open to all feedback… yeah.

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

LOL

It’s like a family I know, expect they have 15 kids and it’s all “J” names.

😅 I guess great minds think alike lolol

Yeah, it’s not vital. It probably wo…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo! This is interesting!!

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

A few typos I caught, but at this point I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for, so let me know. This is interesting and I’m eager to keep reading if you post more!

So man y kids… and…[Read more]