Lightningmouse

Awesome job! You should put up more. I want to see what happens. 😉
I’d take out the “Yup.” after “Are you ready to go?”
Because, technically, she did answer his question there. Whereas if she just launched straight into “having everything ready”, it would work better.

@bluejay It was just an iPhone camera, actually. I think it was more the room lighting that he was doing it in.

@adry_grace

After a while I begin to laugh

Maybe cut out “after a while” here.

It’l be okay.

I think that’s supposed to be “it’ll.” 😉

Just like that her voice breaks.

I would take out “just like that.”

But the choice is yours too make

“Too make” would be “to make.” 😉

but sure enough I find her walking by my side.

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@adry_grace
This is super! I like it a lot…however, I do echo what Hope said about Eon’s emotions needing to run deeper. I also feel like you could use Milennia’s name more instead of saying “she” all the time. That’s all I’ve got! Nice work!!! 🙂 🙂 😉

Wow, @bluejay! That must have taken a LOT of patience! Great job! @writefury Very nice!!!

Awesome job, Tessa! 😀 One thing I would say would be the the legos don’t have to be in motion all the time. Cedric seemed a little twitchy when he was in bed. 😉
My brother made this with Daniel’s lootcrate video: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0By9RBL2p2J_NQ1c5Z3JpdFhyVkk/view?usp=sharing

@spradlin– Yep! Here are the pages.

Feather Quill Pen Clip Art

Free Coffee Cup Clip Art Vector

And then I did the font on picmonkey. 🙂

@writefury Wonderful poem! I like it. 🙂

Wow, I would not have expected that topic title from you. I was looking at it on the homepage wondering who it was while it loaded. My guess was Tessa or maaybeee Kate. Then it popped up and I went “Wow. What happened?”

Definite cautionary writing tale, though. Character arcs can’t be sudden, no matter which way they’re going. You’ll lose your readers.

Thanks so much guys! 😀 I’m glad you liked it and I’ll make any changes that need to be made. 🙂

@spradlin Awesome! 😀
I’m… not quite sure on the copyright thing. It was free clipart off google.

@hope Huh. Mom watched the preview and seemed kind of annoyed by the enhanced romantic element. Maybe I’ll give it a try. 😛
Gathering Blue… was pretty good. It’s a different world. But the ending sort of derails a bit. It’s building up the mystery on one topic and then sort of plot-twists on another topic and doesn’t quite resolve.
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