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@hannah-krynicki I think that’s a good guess, though if I hadn’t known Orwell’s own beliefs, I would have guessed it was against any form of socialist/communist government whatsoever. If you approach the book from a purely logical standpoint, I think you will find that it teaches the risk of attempting a communist society is greater than any…[Read more]

@hannah-krynicki Well, to be technical, he wasn’t against communism (in fact, even though he’s called a socialist, I think communist would be a better term for him). Socialism according to Marx is the necessary middle point in transitioning from capitalism to communism. Socialism is defined as all property being owned by the state and (at least in…[Read more]

True, Major didn’t substantiate all his points, but he did make some good ones (considering the fairy tale setting). I think this probably has something to do with Orwell’s hidden bias. I’m not sure how many people know this, but Orwell was actually a socialist. What he didn’t like was totalitarianism. How in the world he thought he could have one…[Read more]

Yes Ingrid, I actually think you hit on one of the biggest points there. The personalities of the animals are so vibrant. Orwell doesn’t seem to miss a single opportunity to point out the personalities of a single animal. That should be a good lesson on the importance of character even above action.

@hannah-c Ah, I wondered about that. Sneaky you.

@hannah-c Are you on wattpad? What’s your username?

Good observations.

One of the first things I noticed was how much telling there is, but how it actually works out quite well. Orwell tells the story in classic fairy tale style but yet does so with a confidence that makes it seem real. I think this is because of the strong third person style where there is never a hint of Orwell sneaking in his…[Read more]

Street team? Oh, Book Mafia.
The Luxological Bunch
Lightning Team

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The Illuminati. Ha Ha Ha!

@his-instrument Don’t publish it online. Not for copyright reasons, but because you’ll get low-quality critiques. KP is not a good platform for long critique passages. Short ones will work, but long ones are simply way too time consuming to critique on this platform.

If you want a critique of your book, create a new thread and ask if anyone is…[Read more]

@his-instrument Don’t publish it online. Not for copyright reasons, but because you’ll get low-quality critiques. KP is not a good platform for long critique passages. Short ones will work, but long ones are simply way too time consuming to critique on this platform.

If you want a critique of your book, create a new thread and ask if anyone is…[Read more]

@his-instrument If this is a first draft, it is well done. There are a few grammatical errors and such, but not many. If I were doing a full blown edit, there are more things I would point out than I can here, but overall this story is fairly mature. One thing that confused me at first was why the narrating voice had such a modern laid back style…[Read more]

This. Is. Hilarious. I honestly can’t think of much I would change— the dry, matter-of-fact, world-wise and patiently weary voice of the narrator is perfect for showcasing what kind of world they live in, the wry humor is fantastic, and as an avid student of English history I can totally appreciate everything you said about royalty! 😀
If this…[Read more]

This. Is. Hilarious. I honestly can’t think of much I would change— the dry, matter-of-fact, world-wise and patiently weary voice of the narrator is perfect for showcasing what kind of world they live in, the wry humor is fantastic, and as an avid student of English history I can totally appreciate everything you said about royalty! 😀
If this…[Read more]

Wow, looks like characterization is stealing the show! 😀

@bluejay, @hannah-c, @kate-flournoy Sorry I missed it tonight. I’m going to be busy for the next two days, but should be back on Monday.

@the-happy-bookaholic Yes, we have many political parties and you can vote for any of them. It’s just that only the democrats or republicans ever win (except maybe in a few very small government positions). You can also vote for whoever you want. Santa Clause gets a couple votes every year. It would be a huge constitutional crisis if he ever won. 😉

Urgh… yikes, that’s a difficult question. Probably characterization— I don’t struggle with that, but it’s one of those things I feel like I can never study enough of or understand as fully as I should. There’s just so much to learn!
Um… other than that… let’s see… novel structure? Character arcs? (Or would that be in with…[Read more]

Oh boy, I struggle with a lot of little things. Like, writing fluid prose, mastering emotion, getting the sense of timing just right, not being too choppy, picking the right tense, etc.