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@Dragon-Snapper Have pancakes. They fix everything, you know. *pancakes*

@His-Instrument Aaahh, you too. Many times over. 😀

@Dragon-snapper yeah. They said it. 😛

@Dragon-Snapper I’m just gonna shove this on you because this taught me almost everything I know about choppiness.

And as far as action/dialogue tags… that’s when things get tricky. Like Daeus said, it’s a complicated dance of changing up the pattern of things. What I’ve found helps is when you take a basic action and elaborate on it. Don’t…[Read more]

@dekreel @skredder I’m signing out now. I really didn’t get that much done. Wrote about 150 words, read some articles about choppy writing, and resolved I need to read more.

@dragon-snapper I’m not really an expert on this, but the thing that’s helped me most is mixing things up — variety.

Variety in sentence length. I like to mix long, short, and medium sentences in a fairly even blend.

Variety in sentence openers. Too many subject openers in a row can get choppy. Try to throw in some -ings,…[Read more]

@dekreel Well, I was going by the military version. Gamma an Epsilon… I think those are Greek? Or some other version.

I don’t know. That’s just what I’m calling them.

@dekreel Alpha – 1st readers of unedited work.
Beta – 2nd readers of 1st edits
Charlie – 3rd readers of 2nd edits.
Delta – 4th readers of 3rd edits.
Echo – 5th readers of 4th edits.
And so forth. I don’t know if this actually exists.

@his-instrument Ah, that’s awesome. 🙂 I’m very proud of you.

@warrenluther04 Lol. *pats shoulder* There there. You’re only ah… two months late.

LOL Yes you can read it. BUT, you’ll probably have to wait a bit until I’m done with this round of edits. Then, I’ll ask for another round of beta-readers (charlie-readers). But I will need that kind of people, so I’ll be sure to tag you if you’re available…[Read more]

@dekreel You’re welcome.
Feel ya there. *concentrates ‘not’*

@skredder I never melt my own chair. Everyone else sits on the floor.

@dekreel 😀 *melts walking stick* I SHALL WRITE UNASSISTED!
SNAPPER, quit getting distracted.

@kate-flournoy *SLAP* That was for Loki

@dekreel Oh, thanks. Yes, I am friendly to everyone. lol. Perfect timing. 😛

@Daeus

Loki is skeptical.

@dekreel Yep. I’m old now.

@kate-flournoy *mic drop*

@kate-flournoy It’s sap 2.0. It’s the sap of the new age. Loki would drink it.

@Dragon-Snapper *headdesks* :’D

@kate-flournoy