Levi Pierpont

Oh boy this thing made me laugh.

I’ve absolutely nothing to pick on except one thing. I noticed you use subject sentences a LOT. So many of the sentences began with ‘I’ or ‘Me’ or ‘The etc.’ You might try breaking up that pattern a bit— it can sound a little strange.

But otherwise this was great. Sterling has a very distinct personality (so…[Read more]

@hope shhh! *shocked voice* I’m not ready to declare myself in the public market yet! *looks around stealthily, lowers voice* I’ll tell you a secret— you are my guinea-pig.
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Second person. Always second person. 🙂

Okay, wow, thanks for the info. So much of the research I’ve done on indie publishing has come out gloomy and negative, but maybe I just didn’t search deep enough. I’ll definitely keep those books in mind.

Well Daeus. We forgive you.

Sounds like a really, really helpful book. Thanks for sharing! I would love to self-publish… but so many times I’ve heard that self-publishing is a no-no for an author who doesn’t already have a wide reader platform. Maybe that’s not quite as true as it sounds…

Structure nut is very obliging.

Don’t worry, M.K. @the-happy-bookaholic corrects everyone’s grammar on here. It’s nothing personal. 😛

And that poem— wow. As structure goes, I’m don’t know how it was, because I’m not a structure nut (@Daeus is, if you can get him over here) but the words and the raw emotion touched me very… earnestly. You conveyed so much so briefly— or…[Read more]

Well then Denholm would die of poison and the whole world would crumble in ruin, quite simply. 😛

It’s okay— that almost happened anyway, because they were discovered halfway through the camp and he was very, very badly wounded.

Thanks @Daeus and @writefury— the drink is not important. So I conclude it was a good description as descriptions go, but unnecessary, which cancels that out. 😛

Thanks guys! I’ll make it seem less important. 🙂

Gotcha @Hope. Thanks— you’re right.

Quick question for all of you here— how was the description of the drink? Specifically, did I spend too much time on it?

Well thanks! Would you mind posting one of your poems? Or are they all top secret? 😉

Great. Thanks. I’ll definitely be trying it. 🙂

Perhaps you should do a slightly stricter outline for your books.

Hm… yes, more like ‘perhaps you should do an outline for your books.’

Believe me, I’m trying that with the next one. 😛 It can’t hurt to try.

Ooh… that’s a tough question. My absolute favorite poet of all time is J.R.R. Tolkien. He’s slightly famous, though not necessarily for his poetry. 😛
I love just about every kind of poem there is, though I tend to gravitate to sagas and ballads more than anything else.
As for what kind of poetry I write— well, it’s kinda difficult to…[Read more]

Sloggels! I’m adding that to my dictionary!

It’s a time thing. I realized halfway through the book that I spent waaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyy too much time with not really important things in the first half, so once I finish writing the thing I’m going back and fixing a lot more stuff than I ever had to fix before.

And I was exaggerating……[Read more]

And I’m trying to hurry up! I’ve got at least five people on my back, so I’m bound to finish it at least before the beginning of 2017… maybe… 😛 😉

‘Pickiness is the mother of perfection…’ I like that. That should be my motto. 😛

Thanks Daeus— all very good points. I should probably do everything you suggested…

The thing with Gair, though, is he can be really nasty. Not the sort of person who just invites friendship. Besides that, he looks sinister even if he’s on your side, and…[Read more]

Welcome, @mas410! Welcome welcome welcome!

I knew I’d been having a creepy feeling of being followed these last few months…

But this is the bestistest place on the internet. In my humble opinion. I don’t blame you at all for stalking it. 😉

I live in Southern Ohio, and love poetry too, though I don’t have the level of skill it takes to…[Read more]

Hahaha… so fun, @writefury! I don’t think I’ve seen the Studio C you’re referencing, but I got the story just from the poem. 🙂

Thanks so much, @writefury! Denholm and Cobalt should be friends. 😉 😛
I’ll definitely work over that line and see if I can enhance it a little… it’s funny, because I didn’t really see that line as anything all that special or out of the ordinary, but now that you mention it I can see it has potential. 😀

Yes, one thing I forgot to mention is…[Read more]