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@hybridlore

Thanks! Yeah, I know. So many new possibilities for the plot… 😈

😂😂

@grcr

Thank ya!

Oh no, you’re fine. I don’t know if there is much more to say. 😂

@smiley

Thanks for the input, I’m still trying to figure out how I’m going to introduce everyone without info dumping

It’s a struggle

Yesss, I understand. It’s so hardddd 😭 But you’ll get better at it the more you keep writing. Like, I read a ton of stuff about writing and I watch a lot of videos about it, but I don’t really get better unti…[Read more]

@walkbyfaith

Welcome to Kingdom Pen, Marie!! I’m Esther: a volleyball-playing, violin-squeaking, dog-obsessed, homeschooled, fiction-writing, God-loving, teen girl! I’ve written fantasy and dystopian, but I have ideas for books in the genres of historical fiction and contemporary.

Time for questions!

1. Since you’re a semi-avid reader, 😉 , wha…[Read more]

Oh I love it!! Totally gonna be participating! This is gonna stretch me a bit, but it’ll be fun. 😏

@walkbyfaith

Hi! I’m Acancello, also known as Allison! I am homeschooled and in 10th grade. I love dogs, traveling, acting, trying weird food, writing, reading, talking and a lot more 😁! I am writing a dystopian and post-apocalyptic thriller novel now. I’m so glad you could come to Kingdom Pen! Alright, now I’ll ask you some hopefully not alrea…[Read more]

@mcmuffin

Hi! Yay! Another gamer!! I loooove Halo (and portal, have you played portal?) Anyway,  I’m Acancello, also known as Allison! I am homeschooled and in 10th grade. I love dogs, traveling, acting, trying weird food, writing, reading, talking and a lot more 😁! I am writing a dystopian and post-apocalyptic thriller novel now. I’m so glad…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yeah it is, actually. 😂 I didn’t want to write about someone getting married so I chose adoption instead. XDD

Oh and for those of you wondering, Ami’s type 2.

@freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6 @hybridlore @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @smiley @savannah_grace2009 @rae @grcr @anyone-else

Sooo… I was working on some “character-building” the past day or so, and I’ve fixed my MCs’ character arcs/internal conflicts to tie into the theme more and so I can write them better/more accurately. (With a l…[Read more]

@smiley

Ack! Sorry I’m late, but I finally found time to read this. M’kay…

So the one big thing that I noticed was a lot of telling and info-dumping. I could handle the information, but it’s not always enjoyable to read a bunch of backstory. Stuff like that should be sprinkled throughout. Besides that, there were a few places where things…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Of course! (:

@savannah_grace2009 @hybridlore @highscribeofaetherium @jonas @anyone

Ok, so I have bad writing, but my worst writing I deleted years ago!!! 😭 There was three chapters of a book I wrote on my parents computer when I was like 7, I tried to start a few books when I was 9/10/11, I had an almost completed book around 11, but I still have a book I…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I think so! You can go ahead and RP first if you want. 🙃

@hybridlore

Yeah, that totally makes sense! And you’re welcome, I really enjoyed reading it!!

For buildup, I’m not quite sure. Maybe Mason has a big decision to make, and something about the king helps him make that decision? Or maybe to keep it more line with what you have so far, something big rests on the identity of the king?? I’d have to…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Okay, I’m finally here!! XD

So, I was digging pretty hard to find something to critique, so I’ll do my best…

“A hint of fear is smothered in the master’s gruff tone.” – why the fear?? Just because of the curfew?

I agree that it was pretty obvious the man was going to be the king.

In first person it’s really easy to use “is” a lo…[Read more]

OH! And I have Hallie and Easton who I have not RPed for yet but will do so now…

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Easton

“So, are you glad you came? You seem very confident with that waltz now.”

“Yep!” Hallie flashed him her signature smile. “I’m glad you came along.”

Easton bobbed his head in a small laugh. “Anytime. But…” he peered over the heads of students. “Looks lik…[Read more]

Oki. I don’t know how y’all want to switch it up, but I have Fynn, Callista, Lukas, Ami, and Ev available for any other charries to dance with rn. XD So take your pick, lol.

@savannah_grace2009

Ooh, I love it. 😁 I love dogs too. 😝

@rae

Nahimmmm!!! 😭

@hybridlore

I like it!! I can’t really think of any thing else to add besides what the others have said. But there was one paragraph that I was a little confused at:

My gaze snaps back to the ground. The source of the voice stands beside me—a man, maybe in his thirties. From his clothes and his unshaved face, he appears to be a worker of some kin…

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