Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

@kyronthearcanin

Ok, so I love the young thief trope. 😂 (When it’s done right of course 😉 ) So I think Brycen might end up being one of my favorites. 😁

Yeah, I figured I’d have to move some stuff around once the drafting was done. But hey, I’ll just surprise myself and magically have double the chapters that way XD

Right? XD

@kyronthearcanin

Ok, so on chapter 2:

Interesting, I don’t think I have any major critiques or anything on this one. As for Nia, I wouldn’t call her a villain, though she is a minor conflict. I don’t think she’s overboard at all, she’s just not a very likeable character currently, so if that’s what you were aiming for, I think you did great!…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Some parts in chapter two were a bit confusing to me, like the back and forth with the doctors and going to different rooms. And it seemed strange to me that Kirah would tell Keith about what had happened when Jade had told her to keep it a secret. It seemed important that they kept it hidden, but Kirah doesn’t seem too concerned…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Lol, yeah I get it. 😂

I’m the opposite, I’ve gotta work out every plot detail before I start writing. I’ve got pretty much nothing written for mine, and I’ve been working on it for a year 😬😅😂

@kyronthearcanin

Just read all three chapters and saw all the drawings, and I love it all! I’m really looking forward to another chapter!

@kyronthearcanin

Girl, this is so good!! I love it!! 😄

I would suggest separating the two POVs into separate chapters (so you’d have 4 chapters at this point), but you do whatever you want, because chapter length isn’t the most important thing when drafting. 😉

Looking forward to the next chapters!! 😀

@janellebelovedpig

The next 2 chapters you wrote are amazing! I love how each chapter draws you in! Like @kyronthearcanin , I am excited to see where its heading!

@kyronthearcanin

Thanks! I definitely was kind of experimenting with a lot of different things that I normally don’t do in my writing… Like prophecy, and more POVs than I’m used to. Throughout the next few chapters, more are added in, including the male POV. I think something I’ve also done is made a lot of the characters similar in persona…

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@esther-c @freedomwriter76 @acancello @kyronthearcanin @whoever-else-is-welcome-to-chime-in

And here’s part 3:

All day long Little One tried to catch Loving Prudence alone, but the siblings always seemed to be around. Then just before supper Little One saw her chance.

As Little One stepped into the kitchen, Loving Prudence looked up from her…[Read more]

esther-c @freedomwriter76 @acancello @kyronthearcanin @whoever-else-is-welcome-to-chime-in

Part 2 is out now! Thanks for reading! 🤗

@kyronthearcanin

Very intriguing! It captures a very classical fantasy vibe quickly with swords, prophecies… as well as dragons of course, I’m interested where you will take that. I will say that the pacing felt a little weird to me, not because your getting into it too quickly (I’m far worse with that), but because it felt like Kirah was too…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Ooooh! I’ll definitely read this when I get the time! 👍 😄

@kyronthearcanin

Your welcome!

No rush! I know how that can be.

@kyronthearcanin I like it!! It reminds me just a bit of a story I’ve been working a bit on based off How to Train Your Dragon, but mine’s kinda more of a rip-off…..I love the worldbuilding on it though, which is why I keep it.

@kyronthearcanin

Thanks! And I get it, sometimes I even confuse myself with worlds that I built. 🤣

Oh good it’s not just me! 😅🤣

Hmmm…. Good question. I guess I’d like to know if the characters are believable. This first chapter I don’t have as many problems with… The second chapter is where things seem to kind of get weird. I’m a pantser,…

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@kyronthearcanin

I really like this! I’m not usually into reading fantasy that much because excessive world building leaves me often confused, but you did a good job giving us just enough info about the world without it being overwhelming. Also, I love the mysteriousness. Is there anything specific you want comments on?

@kyronthearcanin

Wow! I’m on the edge of my seat! Nicely done, Solfyre!

@kyronthearcanin @freedomwriter76 Thanks!