Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

@rae @theshadow

I’m going to guess neither of you minds what happens 😛

Barnes

Her sight flooding back to her, Barnes found one of her wrists was held by one of the magical tendrils. Her other hand was free, and Reid was recovering from a hit to the face.

In front of them, the snake lay on the ground. Its eyes faded from blue to a cloudy…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

What kind of feedback are you looking for? Do you want just a chill overview of what I think, or more detailed and critique-ish?

@ellette-giselle

Whoa. Can I ask how much of the book is still left? That seems like it’s going to be a lot of sections.

I don’t mind the longer pieces, though, (🤪) as long as you’re okay with me not being as nitpicky. Im not sure if you’re mainly wanting feedback on bigger things or if you want me to catch all the typos and everything too. If…[Read more]

*Bringing this back to the top since Christmas is over* (:

Also, I just saw what you said to Linus about Liam not being a Christian. Then how does Sabina’s statement make sense?

Sabina smiled through tears. “He is happy now. Much happier and safer than I could have ever made him, and much more loved than I could have ever loved him.”

Also, I don’t know if an orphan who hasn’t had a family for a long time…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Good section! I was going to say, it seems weird that Beric would change so quickly, but now I see he’s still going to struggle.

I might post a bunch of stuff on here soon to cope with tearing down my plot board and reconfiguring the whole thing. They say humor is the best coping mechanism.

This definitely applies to ninety percent of story creators, and you can’t convince me otherwise

@savannah_grace2009

I want to get to this eventually! I’m trying to finish a 1,300 page book right now so I’m trying not to read too much else until I do that. XD But I’m still subscribed to this. <3

@theshadow okay! I’ll be sure to share that with my family tonight.

Honestly, they probably are helping because they’re more light hearted and fun.

haha thanks.

(Not me trying to look up encouraging quotes from the squad but all I get is them insulting each other as always….lol)

I’m a third of the way through and I already have a lot of thoughts, so that’s good! I really like Tyn, by the way, favorite character.

@anyone y’all want a villain rant?

also no context whatsoever hehe

“….I would’ve killed your little flightless twins, of course. Suffocated them in my coils before they knew what was happening.” she said, continuing from some time before we’d come in. She didn’t notice us there. “I would’ve loved to watch the look on your face when I came to…

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@ellette-giselle yeah, “girl power” and whatnot is kinda way overblown these days.

Although in the past in many cultures, women were not exactly treated nicely (or sometimes even like people) either, so I think as a society we just kinda vacillate between “too much power” or “too little power” given to them.

not that that’s right, but it’s just…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle lol

I mean, I don’t get the “it’s not Christmasy” thing, If it occurs during Christmas and has themes of Christmas, it is a Christmas movie. I’ve never seen it, but I just looked it up, and if you’re gonna call it “not a Christmas movie” then you might say the same for Home Alone or The Sound of Music, which are also popular…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle I think we’ve all heard you rant about this topic lol

I mean, most of us have female fighter/warrior/soldier/whatever characters for some reason. So we were bound to get the “this is why I don’t quite believe in that” talk (which I don’t think is bad and might actually help us improve our characters)

(another slight…

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@linus-smallprint

Yes, the humans are upset, this just hasn’t been the focus of the story, and with other things to focus on, such as getting rid of the monster, Alan or worries about Iskyagus, this has not been shown much. I can add some subtle hints later that humans are upset about this. Lyens have so far prevailed over the humans, which they u…

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@theducktator thanks!

@whalekeeper haha yep

@mineralizedwritings yessssss good for you girl!!

if you ever make a manga comic of your writing I would totally read it.

@linus-smallprint

I think it is high time I read through everything, that way you get a perspective from someone who doesn’t have to wait for each section and reads it in roughly a couple sittings. 👍

@mineralizedwritings ohhhh that might be part of what I hate about most anime stuff but like about your art despite the fact that it’s the same style haha