Ava Murbarger (Solfyre)

@acancello

Not trying to take over this thing lol, but I figured I’d share this. It’s the first bit on a character I’ve been working on, kind of a mystery:

A freezing wind howled through the trees, piercing Elrin’s cloak and chilling him to the bone. With the thoughts circling through his mind, he hardly noticed the cold. He was a foreigner in a…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Actually… I really don’t know. 😅 Now that you mention it, it’s definitely a solar system, not a galaxy, so that was just a mistake on my part. Thanks for catching it! 🙂

@seekjustice

Nice to meet you!’

I’m Solfyre! I’m a soon-to-be highschooler, worldbuilder, guitar-player, and wolf-lover. I love bringing God subtly into my writing, and exploring aspects of Him in my worlds and characters. I don’t have any dogs (I love them, it’s just that my mom is allergic), but I do have a cat, Stripes (my brother named him…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Thanks!

They are more or less in the same orbit, though some are a little farther than others. Lupus is slightly farther, while Leor is the closest. Aavian, Arcania, and Lacertilia take their places in between the distances of Lupus and Leor.

@thearcaneaxiom @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @gwyndalf-the-wise

@landric @anyone

Hello again! Back with chapter three of Healer. Don’t feel like you have to read it right away, but it’s here for if you’d like to. Still, any critiques are definitely welcome and appreciated! 🙂

Chapter 3

The wind is roaring now as I follow Dune, weaving through the…[Read more]

@esther-c

Thanks!

@thearcaneaxiom

You’re fine! Any help is appreciated, and you’ve never come off like that.

Also, if you ever do post a chapter of your WIP, I would love to read it and offer any advice I can!

@thearcaneaxiom @keilah-h

Full honesty, I started this WIP maybe a couple months ago, so it’s not very far along yet worldbuilding-wise🤣. These are all things I’m going to have to work out. Thanks for mentioning them, because it makes things so much easier when I can have some kind of list of things to tweak or change.

@acancello

This is a great idea! I love your description! 😃

I recently had to do a string-along story in school. Basically, the title is one word, then from there the sentences grow in length. I made it a short version of a WIP I worked on when I was in… third grade? 🤣

Anyway, here it is:

Wolf

Sirius ran. Over the hills. Past the rocky…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

They hold them to the side. My original thought was that it would be awkward- and would look strange- for them to hold it straight out. Not to get into too much detail but an enemy could just shove the handle down their throat… Yeah, so to the side. Besides, in most battles (there are few for the Felisaro anyway, as they don’t…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom @keilah-h

Wow! Thanks for the great advice! (And the more critiquing the better. it really does help)

To answer your question, yes, Quelin is definitely going to be a big part of the story. As for the whole thing about the thumbs, the Felisaro had to be extremely inventive to get past that. They basically started out with…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Thanks!

And wow, that’s a great idea! I’ve read both Warriors and Wings of Fire (up until… a certain point? I don’t know how long they’ll keep going…), but never thought of actually doing it myself. Thanks again for the awesome idea! I will definitely get to work on that. If I ever post it, I’ll definitely tag you! 😃

@gwyndalf-the-wise

Thanks!

Yeah, I’m definitely working on transitioning scenes, especially the battle there.

I’ll just have to let you wonder about Quelin… Don’t want to spoil it lol. But I do love his character and enjoyed writing him. 🙂

@karissa-chmil

Thanks!

For quite a while, though I’ve never really been serious about it. Just kind of random scribbles in notebooks, that technically are supposed to be for schoolwork lol. I basically just needed to get the idea for what Rina was going to look like. That drawing is probably one of my favorites. 🙂

@landric

Thanks for the great advice! I will definitely be working on all of that. I’ve noticed that a lot of the time I forget to describe, or maybe fully describe things.

Thanks for taking the time to read it! 🙂

@thearcaneaxiom @landric @gwyndalf-the-wise @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @anyone-else

Alright! For anyone who wants to read, this is chapter 2 of Healer. It introduces a couple of my favorite characters. This is definitely open to critique, as I want to see what readers think of it. Sometimes the writer can’t see flaws, or even strengths, in their…[Read more]