KydonAndWillow

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Oh ok.. I might’ve confused myself lol 😅

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Just read it… 😐

Oh. My. Goodness. My heart literally almost stopped, lol.

One question: Is their father one of the Tarnas you mentioned in the first post… that lived a bit of a while away?

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Ok!

So there’s a pretty big age gap between them?

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OOOOhhhhhhHHH!!

One question. What made Willow change her mind so drastically?? She was so adamant about it before. Why is she suddenly ok with it??

Ok, I lied. Two questions. How old is Willow?

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It doesn’t seem terribly cliche to me. I would agree that the lost heirs trope is really common. My advice would be to find a way to twist that trope. Changing cliches in interesting ways is one of the best ways to create good plots. I know KP has some articles that address this that you could check out.

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Oh boy……. 😶

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Gotcha. 🙃

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This seems like a good start to a story and I’m interested to see where it’s going! There’s just one thing I would point out:

After the box is dropped, and Kydon hides, it seems like it changes perspectives briefly to the twins, because if Alyson is hiding he wouldn’t see them point at him. This is assuming that you’re using a l…[Read more]

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Ooo… this is getting interesting….

I don’t know why, but Kydon’s thoughts in the last sentence had me laughing.

I don’t have too much to say, but maybe you could combine some of the sentences so that is runs smoother. Like, instead of saying:

• Caleb dropped a box suddenly and it broke open. Bows, arrows, swords, and…

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Awesome! 😄

Ooo.. I’m excited to find out what it is… 😏

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It sounds good still! 😀 There are some things that I noticed, though…

I know in the first chapter you mentioned the brick walkway, but you may want to add even more description the twin’s house so the picture is painted better. As the reader, I’m wondering if its large or small? What color are the walls and what kind of…[Read more]

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Yay! (sorry this is late… heh heh)

Reading it now… 😁

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Oh, I didn’t see your reply to grcr 😅 lag.

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Ok, I see. 😄

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I love it!! Onnnneeeee thing that stood out to me was this line (and please take my comments with a grain of salt):

He thought of his sister’s gentle, quiet spirit, and his restless, fiery one and shook his head. Sometimes he didn’t believe that they were related.

There’s nothing inherently wrong with it, but it’s kind of going a…[Read more]

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Hi there!

I like it so far. I love the how you wrote it. I thought the part where he put the nightgown in the oven was funny…😄

I’m not fully qualified for editing, but I did have one question….

Is Kydon on his way to give the muffins in the first paragraph of the book? I was a bit confused… at first I thought he was…[Read more]

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1. People like myself, honestly. My sister pointed this out because Willow is how I am around strangers. But Kydon is how I am around my siblings and good friends at 3 a.m.!

That’s awesome! (Totally understand hanging with friends/siblings late at night. It can be dangerous 🤣) Those characters sound like so much fun!!

2. Janner! F…

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@kydonandwillow

Hello! I’m Light Warrior Pen, romantic suspense writer and all around artsy person.

Questions:

Do you include romance in your writing?

If you could go anywhere in the world and didn’t have to worry about time, money, or safety, where would you go?

Have you ever been published (blogs count)?

Welcome to the Kingdom!

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Welcome to Kingdom Pen!! I’m Esther: a volleyball-playing, violin-squeaking, dog-obsessed, homeschooled, fiction-writing, God-loving, teen girl!

Time for some questions!

1. Who’s your favorite character to write? Why?/What are they like?

2. Who’s your favorite character from either a movie/tv show or book/series?

3. If you c…[Read more]

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Cool! My brother is an engineering student, and he is making a sci-fi space fantasy book too! *whispers* I don’t understand half of it!

That’s really cool! Is he getting into the more engineering aspect with spaceships and stuff? Is he exploring other sci-fi concepts with a little more rigor, like with physics and biology?

Soft, m…

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