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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
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Joseph returned to the Caddicks and committed himself to the work the Lord had called him to. Mr. Caddick, David, and Stephen were eager to dive into the training Noah and Darrien gave to the other young men seeking to lead in the church. Not…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
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Joseph and Noah were exhausted and slept until evening. It was Joseph who woke first. Getting up, he roused Noah, who was sleeping lightly. The two tidied the room and Joseph started downstairs. When he reached the bottom, one of the little…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month, 1 week ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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Happy happy day! It’s super long!!!
Joseph sat on his bed and carefully opened the journal, his fingers trembling with the wave of emotions that filled him. Memories of Aaron flooded his mind, and for a moment he was too blinded by tears to…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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The next morning when Joseph woke, he lay in bed a moment, trying to remember what had happened the day before. All at once it came back to him and he scrambled to his feet. Yanking on his vest he hurried into the hall and knocked on Asher and E…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
ALTERNATE NEXT SECTION!!!!!
Please be honest as y’all read this, because saving the boys is going to be a HUGE change. However, I think it may be the right one, and some interesting things happened that makes me think so. However, I am still on the edge, a…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Don’t rub it in.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
having hybridlore on the protection squad is scary! Why did I ever tell her about it?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
okay!! Fine!! I give in.
I’ll rewrite that whole scene tomorrow.
y’all win.
*slams down pencil in despair.*
it actually won’t hurt the plot much, and you are actually making sense.
fine. I’ll do it.
they go free. Both of them.
I can’t believe I’m doing this.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
*graciously accepts confetti and medal* Thank you, thank you very much.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
@koshka YES. Thank you.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Hey, all the reasons people wanted to save Eric could apply to Asher too. He’s also young. He looks innocent… lol. Make them react more to both of them instead of just the younger one, maybe?
OR highlight how hurt Eric is by Asher’s death in front of the crowd. That’ll make them see how much it’s affecting families and hurting c…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
NEXT SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Joseph sat at the table and stared at his plate. Noah and Darrien had already eaten and were pulling on their boots. They knew the hard day of work they had ahead, and they had been able to eat
Sabina put her arm over Joseph’s sh…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
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Sorry it’s so short.
Joseph woke. For a long moment he lay, trying to figure out what was happening and where he was. He had been so exhausted he didn’t even remember lying down. There was an odd sound, a sound he knew he had heard many times be…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 2 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
WARNING:
There has been a change in the rapid time jump. It is now a bigger time jump, and Joseph is 19. Sorry about the whiplash any of y’all are experiencing after that. lol.
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“Joseph, do you think the gates will ever open?”
Asher…
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freedom posted an update 1 month, 2 weeks ago
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For anyone that’s tagged me in things, I’ll try to respond to some of y’all’s various replies/questions/things here on KP sometime hopefully soon. Life has been busy (I’ve finished what I hope to be the ✨final✨…[Read more] -
Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
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If this book had a theme song, this would have to be it. I have listened to it several times while editing, and this just about embodies the whole story.
What do y’all think?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon
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The wind blew gently on the roof of the little house in the middle of the great capital city of Ardenta. On the roof, his legs crossed and a Bible on his knees, was a young man. He was reading intently, and every now and then he leant over to write dow…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h
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Joseph curled up in his bed. He could hear the murmur of voices downstairs and knew that Noah and Darrien were holding one of their secret meetings with a few young men in the church. Sabina was in the other room, tucking in Asher and Eric. He could hear her gentle voice…
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Aha!
*pulls on gloves*
*Grabs gold pen*
Lisa was looking for that. You don’t want her looking for you instead!
*Looks around*
Oooo, nice story, Ellette. I like Julian.
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Oh, I’m so sorry! I’ll be praying that you feel better soon! Happy early Thanksgiving, and congrats on your maybe final edit!! 💕💕
@hybridlore Thank you so much for the prayers and congratulations💜
Good for you!!! I can’t wait for it to be out!
Oh no! I had that a few months ago! It lasted FOREVER! I’ll be praying. It’s miserable.
Oh that sounds super fun! If the short film ever goes online send me a link. I’d love to see it.
@ellette-giselle Thank you for the prayers💜 And I’m glad you’re excited!! ✨
I’ll keep that in mind😉✨💜
Ooof. You have my prayers. Pneumonia isn’t fun. Try to get a lot of rest. *Offers a cup of tea and a pillow*
Awesome news about the 2nd book!
Hey, it’s good to see you! ❤️🥲 I’ve missed seeing the Queen of Emojis and HistFic. 👑📖
Ugh. Walking Pneumonia hit my sisters a month ago. It’s frustrating when the cough won’t go away or even do anything other than bruise your throat. I’ll be praying for you. *Adds honey to the tea* Honestly, we all need to rest sometimes. It’s okay to take your…[Read more]
@freed_and_redeemed I’ll be praying!
Aw man, that does NOT sound fun. 😣 I’ll be praying for your quick recovery!! 🫶🏻
Ohh no, I’ll be praying for you, too.
And aay!! That’s exciting about your book!
Happy early Thanksgiving! 😊
I’m so sorry that sounds so rough!! I’ll def be praying girl 🫶🏻 We love ya!
And congrats on the final stage of the editing process!!!! I’m sooo excited for you!!! ❤️