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hybridlore replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 day, 4 hours ago
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 4 hours ago
Yeah. That makes sense.
Like the Imperial officers would just stand by and let him.
I know, but he could at least try. I think it would make his death more meaningful and give a bigger impact. But it’s up to you.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 4 hours ago
Yeah, good point. Is there a way you could adjust his age, or is that set in stone?
Hmm… yeah, it could still work as a wake-up call, even if Asher’s not that young. To be honest, nineteen is pretty young to be executed though, especially if he (a.) wasn’t a soldier that betrayed their country, like Adrian, and (b.) has a young…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 4 hours ago
Hey, all the reasons people wanted to save Eric could apply to Asher too. He’s also young. He looks innocent… lol. Make them react more to both of them instead of just the younger one, maybe?
OR highlight how hurt Eric is by Asher’s death in front of the crowd. That’ll make them see how much it’s affecting families and hurting c…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 5 hours ago
He can go with Joseph to that city!!! And be a missionary!!
Or he just continues as normal, except grieving for Asher… what does he even do right now? Go to school? Work? He could stay living with Sabina and the guys for a while.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 5 hours ago
IT’S OKAY! We’ll pretend it never happened. It will get lost in the KP forums forever…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 5 hours ago
HA! I actually have a chance?
Please, please, please…. 🙏 🥺 Think of all the scenes you could write!
Lolol
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 5 hours ago
That would make it more interesting, instead of just having more characters die off we’d get to see Eric struggling with his brother’s death.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 5 hours ago
No no no no no!!!!!! 😭😭😭 Why are you doing this to me, Ellette? 😢
Can’t you just… save Eric?? 😭 They said he could go free…
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The Ducktator replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day, 6 hours ago
Yes!!! Stripe got hugged!!!! I’m glad the crow showed up again. I’d almost forgotten about them.
It’s destination was the capital, Pryde.
That should be Its, without the apostrophe.
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The Ducktator replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 day, 17 hours ago
Oh, he is.🤣 I’ll have to remember that.
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MineralizedWritings replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 day, 17 hours ago
Sounds like a character XD
if you want to be confusing you can say わかりません(Wakarimasen) which means ‘I don’t understand’ next time lol.
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The Ducktator replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 day, 17 hours ago
Our entire conversation was weird.🤣 He also randomly speaks in a British accent during co-op, so yeah. XD
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MineralizedWritings replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 day, 17 hours ago
Yw! I love language questions lol. Yeah Japanese doesn’t have the ah sound in abby, only the au sound so that probably is your name. Idk why somebody would say thanks in a language the recipient doesn’t know 😂😂
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The Ducktator replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 day, 17 hours ago
Thanks! That last word is supposed to be my name, I think. I’m Abby.
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MineralizedWritings replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 day, 18 hours ago
Oh that sounds cool! I’ve seen western towhees here, we get owls sometimes too.
Oh yes! I mean I don’t really speak it, but I can read basic stuff okay.
ありがとう is Arigatou, or thank you.
アビイ is Katakana, which is used for words that are foreign in Japan (Like American names). I’m assuming this is a Japanized version of the…[Read more]
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The Ducktator replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 day, 18 hours ago
My favorite bird I’ve ever seen is probably a Brown Booby. I live in the middle of Indiana, and I’m not sure how this bird got here, but he was at a state park 2 hours from my house, and my parents agreed to take a detour on our way to vacation. It was so cool!!!! And a couple days ago I saw my first Eastern Towhee, so…[Read more]
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RAE replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 day, 22 hours ago
@liberty @whoever is in this rp
So…I used to write animal fiction. In fact my first short story (written 2018) was about a jackrabbit and a meerkat. I stopped because it didn’t click for me, but I think I’m going to join anyways. So, sorry in advance if these charries are wobbly, I haven’t told stories about them for probably at least three or…[Read more]
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Kefa replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 days, 3 hours ago
I̶̡̨͖̳̮͓͎̱͎͍̻͍̖͖͇̭͎̪͈̯͔̼͔̗̥̙͇̹̼̭̥̖̥͎͔̘̥͎͚̣̞͇͈̖̤̎͊́͛̇̂̈́̉̓̚̕ ̷̧̧͕̜̺͕̝̻̤͎̼̤̫̹̩̖̲̤̤̪̜̺̘͙̤̤̣̰́͗̉̑̔̏̀̈́̀͌̀́̿͊̽̄͌̀̈̉̈́̓̔͊̆͐…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 days, 7 hours ago
Ha! I got it right!
😢😢 Please tell me Eric and Asher don’t die too. There is too much death in this book. 😭
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