Keilah H.

@rae

I really like it! Mandin and Nahim’s relationship is probably my favorite part. I enjoyed reading it a lot. Please tag me when you have more chapters finished ☺️

@rae

True. But it was a great picture all the same

@ellette-giselle

hair and eye color do not make a character alone.

@whalekeeper

to be honest, I was holding off a little bit on replying because I just am not sure how to correctly continue this, but I shall try.

Think of this another way. Shouldn’t we treat the Gospel with respect for what it is? And writing for what it is? They have different purposes.

But the purpose of a Christian is to “go into all the w…[Read more]

Oh, and I don’t know if S.D. Smith meant Smalls to be a sort of Jesus figure, but if he did, I’m sorry, but I’m, never reading The Green Ember again

@keilah-h @freed_and_redeemed

while it’s a stretch, you could say that Aragorn and Smalls, the king characters who take their thrones in the end, could partially be considered analogues of Jesus.

If I hear anyone saying this and actually believing it, then they will have the wrath of a German on their hands!

(I understand you’re just mentioning t…[Read more]

@rae

In a shorter sentence, you like the drawing itself, but it looks nothing like Friedrich.

it looks kinda like him………….:D

@grcr

CONGRATULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

@ellette-giselle

Even though this wasn’t actually Friedrich it was quite good! Like I mentioned before, your artistic skills are pretty amazing! The hair is… not quite Friedrich’s. And the facial expression isn’t really his either. (and of course the clothing is off) but otherwise pretty good.

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@keilah-h @whalekeeper

Whaley, I think the personality is what counts, and you have to admit, if I knew someone like Sniper in real life, I’d be immediately befriending him…to at least keep him out of trouble XD

@linus-smallprint @keilah-h

Here you go, my two faithful readers! 😀

The next morning, Aaron met Sabina in the hall. Noah was with him, so he felt comfortable talking to her. “Sabina, can I speak to you a moment?”

“Of course,” replied Sabina. “Is everything alright?”

Aaron nodded. “Last night, Joseph came to me and asked if he could stay he…

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@whalekeeper

LOL this is such a funny idea! Now I’m kind of motivated to go write, xD

@freed_and_redeemed @whalekeeper @keilah-h @theshadow @grcr @esther-c

I don’t know if there’s an armory in this place, so I just added one.

Ayla

I rubbed my eyes blearily. Had I fallen out of bed? I put my hand on the ground. It was…stone? I leapt to my feet. “Wow.”  Sun shone through a high circular window, glinting off of what appeared to b…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Never be surprised if a song I provide is from a video game. Most of the music I listen to is from video games.

That’s just sad. You need to broaden your music listening habits. You are missing out on some of the greatest composers in history! It’s…. it’s like eating PBJ for every meal. Every day!!! If you need some good…[Read more]

@grcr

Woah, wait… wow. Thank you! 😄😄

You deserve it!! Man, you are super good!

Ohh… ok. I was concerned about that…

Honestly it looks exactly like the military uniform of his kingdom, which is sho0cking because I never told you what it looks like. lol.

@linus-smallprint

You described him having ‘chin-length hair’, so I looked that up for me…

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@keilah-h

Oh, goodie, questions about charries and worldbuilding!

odd question but what kind of accent does Mandin have? I see you’re making a point of sometimes cutting off the g’s at the end of verbs and using “ya” for “you.” I do that myself when writing characters with accents (specifically Southern  and Australian/Lower British ones), so th…

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@linus-smallprint

I have no idea. I just found it.

@whalekeeper

So are you strengthening your core to increase your balance in jiu-jitsu or for other reasons? Cuz I’m a volleyball player and have some really good reps for balance… 😏 (only a few core exercises tho)

@whalekeeper

Oh, i need to get some writing done so I will definitely be participating. Maybe I’ll write today and then wait a day or to for the soreness from today to go away before posting XD it looks like you’ve already had a workout here

@whalekeeper

I’lllet anyone else have a chance. Tomorrow I’ll come back and snipe you again.

If you survived today and didn’t kill this post. lol

also, @highscribeofaetherium don’t worry about critiques. While I always welcome it, I’m not specifically looking for it this time. I just need to know someone’s actually reading it and I didn’t just waste two years of my life obsessing way too much.