Keilah H.

@the_lost-journal

I love your signature 🤣🤣🤣

@ducktator

Can I use the lyrics of your song and put to some music?

@linus-smallprint

😭😢

It’s okay…. I understand.

@loopylin @keilah-h
I’ve never used Discord, but I’m open to it!! I wasn’t aware you could have separate channels and such.

Keilah, Slack is mostly used for businesses, but I’ve also been a part of a writing camp that uses it and it works pretty well. The only problem is that if we use the free version, the message history is only 90 days.

@ellette-giselle

Yep! I noticed that! 😆 “Teacher.” I like it.

@hybridlore

Awesome!! I’m so glad you liked it!!!

Yeah….. Rolf had a rough time of it, but he got out sooner, whereas Leon was in the bad situation longer… things just didn’t escalate so high.

btw, was it you who asked about him changing his name? Well, if it was, you now have an answer!

@ellette-giselle

I love the way you put us inside Rolf’s story instead of having him just tell it. It worked so much better. Also, the transitions were great.

Good section. The part about Conrad was sad, though. I don’t really have any big critiques. Great job!

@theshadow

It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

@freed_and_redeemed

Love it!!

Also was not expecting Erich! I need to know how he joined the American army!!!

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Interesting POV switch. A new technique I tried out for telling long stories rather then having a ton of first-person dialogue. Let me know what y’all think.

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
September 9th
The Empire<…

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@theshadow

Oooo!! I like this!! This is getting good!

And, what if, what if we don’t make it?

This is a little cluncky because of the punctuation. If you did: “And what if–– what if we don’t make it?” or “And what if. . . what if we don’t make it?” either of those would work well. Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrif…[Read more]

@keilah-h

@hybridlore

Thanks you two.

As for online, I don’t trust it. I’ve heard and seen too many online things get hacked for my liking. 😅

Thanks for the suggestion though!

@esther-c I like that idea.

We could also do Discord. It’s really great for organizing and customizing things. We could have different channels that are like the different topics, and we could even set up something similar to the Bumbling Henchman/ Chosen One/ ect. titles

Or if we can’t do Slack find another free platform where we can have separate channels/forums to keep everything organized

I’m half-tempted just to create our own Slack community at this point. Since (i think) we all trust each other. And then only people we know can get in (no more stalkers XP).

Because if KP was just abandoned, then we’ve got our own little writing community that will live on

Idk 🤷🏻‍♀️ Just an idea…

@grcr

About his eyes on fire, is it more of just his irises or is it the whole thing?

Whole eye on fire pls

And what colors do you want his clothes to be?

I don’t really know to be honest. Whatever normal raggy clothes have in color. (sry that’s not really helpful)

@keilah-h

That one.

@keilah-h

The one that hit Florida. Milton, I think.

Thanks!

@beth-torres

Ryla

The look on the face of the other boy told Ryla that this was not an isolated incident. Suddenly the boy on the floor grabbed his hat and leapt to his feet. Startled, Ryla fell into the wall.

The boy pointed at her. “Do you eat strawberry leaves?”

Ryla hugged her bag closer. “No?” Was that wrong? What was a strawberry? “Who are you?”

@koshka

Thank you! I tried the Get in Touch page a week or two ago, but I haven’t heard back.